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Wizzard
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0 posted 2000-02-12 01:13 AM


So many different post
and many are quite the same,
Still a friendly place
where every body knows your name,
Some will make you laugh
until you hurt inside,
Other`s will tell everything
with nothing left to hide,
No matter how your feeling
Good,happy or bad,
Your friend`s here in Passion
Will never leave you Sad.
                                        

Sorry everyone,I know that this doesn`t really do those here in Passion justice but It`s all I could come up with for now...


< !signature-->

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.




[This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-12-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Wizzard - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
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1 posted 2000-02-12 01:19 AM


Wizard - another nice poem - you are right, passions is definitely the place to be!  I hope you are still smiling ..... Roniece ....
Wizzard
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2 posted 2000-02-12 01:22 AM


Yes Mam,
From ear to ear..lol
Thank you for your kind reply Roniece


 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
3 posted 2000-02-12 01:31 AM


Looking forward to reading more of your work Wizard !           ....... Roniece ......

mmm, can you please tell me how to get the smiley face happening? I can't work it out for the life of me!!! LOL

devina
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since 1999-10-28
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Cali
4 posted 2000-02-12 01:38 AM


Where everybody knows your name...reminds me of Cheers...maybe the day will come where we can all sit down and share a cold one!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Wizzard
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5 posted 2000-02-12 01:41 AM


Devina,
that was my thought as well when I wrote that part...that`s a great show


Roniece,when you post a reply,scroll down a little and you`ll see,
"Available Smilies"
well the little things on the left of the smiles are what you want to put on your post and it will come out as the smile beside it..
I hope this help`s you?< !signature-->

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.


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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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6 posted 2000-02-12 01:46 AM


AH!!!!!!!  now I know!!             
)   THANK YOU!       .... Roniece ....  xx

Wizzard
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7 posted 2000-02-12 01:52 AM


Kicking feet back and forth
aaawww shuck`s  
dem xx`s really got me  
LoL....your welcome Miss Mam   < !signature-->

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.


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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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8 posted 2000-02-12 02:04 AM


Now I'm the one who's smiling here Wizzard !

                          

Roniece

Wizzard
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9 posted 2000-02-12 02:37 AM


Roniece,
any time that I can give someone a smile,I can smile myself.
Your a sweety.
Thank you for being so kind.    < !signature-->

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.




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Mistikman
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since 2000-01-10
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San Jose, CA, USA
10 posted 2000-02-12 03:10 AM


Some of us like passions a little to much   I think we should start PA-Passions Anonymous  
Seriously though, cool poem, and I agree that last line could use a little work. If you are having trouble finding a rhyming word, check out this page: http://www.link.cs.cmu.edu/cgi-bin/dougb/rhyme.cgi

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion


Beki
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since 1999-09-15
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Newport Beach, CA, USA
11 posted 2000-02-12 04:24 AM


Maybe "that you came are really glad" ? awkward I know.....

or "a smile to your face will add"?

or "will never make you mad"?

SIGH...harder than it ought to be! But hey, I liked the poem!  

Wizzard
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since 2000-02-09
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12 posted 2000-02-12 12:44 PM


Mistik,Beki,
Thank you for your help and replies.
I have edited this and I hope it does a little more justice to those here in Passion?
I know it could still use a little more work but sometime`s my mind draw`s a blank

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.

Tasi
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since 2000-02-08
Posts 38
Canada
13 posted 2000-02-12 01:07 PM


Truly a fun place to be and wonderful to share your work with others who can appreciate it   I believe you said it all Wizzard !!

Tasi  

Michael
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since 1999-08-13
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14 posted 2000-02-12 02:44 PM


There's always justice in truth, Wizzard and there is much truth in this verse.  As a member of Passions I thank you.  Your contributions in poetry as well as support and friendship are what Passions is all about.


michael

tracie66
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since 2000-01-18
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15 posted 2000-02-13 01:28 AM


Wizzard you did well, an excellent tribute we all thanks you           Tracie
Wizzard
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16 posted 2000-02-13 04:23 AM


Taci and Tracie I want to thank you both for your input,replies and support.
It`s the replies that makes Passion so special.
Thank you both  

Michael,
Buddy I feel for you,Damn do I feel for you.
I sure as heck hope all work`s out with you two....no matter what happens,DONT GIVE UP ON YOUR FRIENDS HERE AT PASSION...OK?
KEEP YOUR HEAD UP BUD.

 Today is the first day of the rest of my life.
And the begining of a new one.


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