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The Red-Hot Lover............#1

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Balladeer
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0 posted 02-11-2000 11:14 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer


A thump! A step - echoes down
The sidewalk of a lonely street
That lies within that part of town
Where blind men steal and beggars cheat

A huddled figure moves along
Clothing worn in disarray.
Footsteps play a dismal song -
A thump! A step - he makes his way.

Grim faces peer behind the panes
Of tenements that line the street
As echoes rise to make his presence
Noticed in the summer heat

And one can hear the neighbors say
From under disapproving eye
That casts a weary look his way,
"The red-hot lover"s passing by."

A study at his huddled form
Or peering at his wrinkled face
Would not reveal a hint of warm
Compassion glowing nor a trace

Of qualities that make hearts run
Or bid defenses slowly fade
Like chocolate melting in the sun
Or waltzes from the hit parade.

Yet it holds true in younger days
That doubled figure stood erect,
Lured the girls in many ways
By plying them with false respect,

Fooling them with tender words
As they surrendered willingly
To meet the morn with nothing more
Than visions of his memory.

Warm lips called out to beg him stay
With pleading tones that slowly died
Against the heat of summer's day.
He just smiled and walked away.

Some say that God created age
To tell us when to settle down
To share the miracles of life
And count the blessings that abound

But no one told the red-hot lover
Whistling down the garden way
That youth and flowers never last
But slowly pale and fade away.

The years have not been kind to him.
His energy and zest are spent.
His hair and teeth are memories.
His belly sags. His spine is bent.

A tumored leg has been removed,
Replaced by crutch instead of bone
And memories of days gone by
Remind him that he's all alone.

A thump! A step - echoes down
The sidewalk of a lonely street
That lies within that part of town
Where blind men steal and beggars cheat..

Where rosebuds wither in the sun,
Where skinny dogs and old men roam.
A thump! A step - he makes his way.
The red-hot lover's going home.

© Copyright 2000 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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1 posted 02-11-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Not quite sure what the word is that I'm looking for to describe this one.  A bit saddening! Though always well done.

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
Martie
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2 posted 02-11-2000 11:21 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Oh Michael, Wow!  This is wonderful, so full of the truth of a life with your wonderful vision.
Meadowmuse
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3 posted 02-11-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Balladeer, this is superb work with all the  elements of a classic. You couldn't have painted it more clearly in my mind. Fine writing.

Claire
devina
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4 posted 02-12-2000 01:42 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

A tale well told to be sure...needless to say that your title caught my attention right away..hehe...Maybe this is his punishment for breaking so many hearts???

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
JamesMichael
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5 posted 02-12-2000 06:24 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

So thats what happens to red hot lovers.  Is he related to Cassanova?  Very descriptive writing..you are really blessed with a wonderful gift to write.  James
Poet deVine
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6 posted 02-12-2000 11:22 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I know I shouldn't feel sad for him, but I do. He was a cad, but he's still a human being.... a sad tale. And as redundantly said, written wonderfully!  
Denise
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7 posted 02-12-2000 11:30 AM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wonderful poem, Balladeer. Alone is so sad, even for someone whose lifestyle has made it so. Excellent writing.  

Denise
Tasi
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8 posted 02-12-2000 11:38 AM       View Profile for Tasi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tasi

Balladeer what a picture you paint...incredibly vivid. How wonderful to take a look at ones past and reflect on how it affects thier future.
hoot_owl_rn
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9 posted 02-12-2000 12:08 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

wow...the imagery in this one has left me speachless...you've gave a good message beyond all those wonderful but sad words.
Corinne
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10 posted 02-12-2000 04:22 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Karma never fails and your poem paints a rich portrait of the slow, eventual "gotcha!"

Nicely done, Balladeer!   I love the characterization, as well!

Corinne
Isis
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11 posted 02-12-2000 08:06 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Balladeer, beautifully written and it's true, what you give out you get back times three.  It is kind of sad but deserved too.
As always my dear, well written and a joy to read.  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


 
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