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With One Hand and One Heart

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Alwye
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In the space between moments


0 posted 02-11-2000 11:09 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Alwye

A sheath of blackened apathy
Falls between our souls
Separating
Leaving us abandoned
Within our hollow existance.

The gunshots rip the sky
Slicing through the nameless
As we walk quickly by
Giving not a glance
As blood curdles at our feet.

Our mother cries acid tears
As her emerald heart dies
Falling helplessly
Squirming under the spinning blade
Of destructive progress.

Silent screams of the oppressed
Struggle to lay dormant
For if truth should be revealed
The wicked price
Could be their lives.

Shallow perfection reigns
Within suburban utopias
Where fresh paint
And warm candlelight
Gild us with ignorance.

With one hand and one heart
The scarlet path many tread
Can begin to clear
It's cold, barren soil
Free to grow dreams again.

The symphony of sweet release
Needs but one voice to begin
But the melody cannot sing
If our spirits live in the shadows
And fail those who need us most.


 *Krista Knutson*

One lives in the hope of becoming a memory.
~*Antonio Porchia*~
© Copyright 2000 Krista Botterill - All Rights Reserved
Dusk Treader
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1 posted 02-11-2000 11:48 PM       View Profile for Dusk Treader   Email Dusk Treader   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dusk Treader

What a dark piece, Krista.  The imagery you used was brilliant in its description of pain and darkness.  I really like this poem, especially the closing stanza.  It had me tingling.  Great poem Krista.

 In flames I shall not be consumed, but reborn. -- Abrahm Simons

Mistikman
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2 posted 02-12-2000 03:03 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Great poem Alwye. It is very dark and mysterious  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

Beki
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3 posted 02-12-2000 04:27 AM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

Dark, effective imagery...especially taken with:
"Silent screams of the oppressed
Struggle to lay dormant
For if truth should be revealed
The wicked price
Could be their lives.

Shallow perfection reigns
Within suburban utopias
Where fresh paint
And warm candlelight
Gild us with ignorance."
Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley


4 posted 02-12-2000 10:54 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

I've read your work since you joined and have often told you that your gift is a wonder to behold. This is one of your best!  
Alwye
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In the space between moments


5 posted 02-12-2000 09:45 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you all!

Ms. deVine- Especially coming from you, your comments mean a lot to me.  


 *Krista Knutson*

One lives in the hope of becoming a memory.
~*Antonio Porchia*~
christies heart
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6 posted 02-12-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for christies heart   Email christies heart   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for christies heart

Wonderful and so true. Sometimes it seems like an up hill battle and apathy has become our only shield.
Breathe~
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7 posted 02-12-2000 10:01 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

What an eye opener...I can shamefully say I have been guilty of wearing blinders at times...

This one make you think...Great job!


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Dawn Eclipse
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The Horsehead Nebula


8 posted 02-12-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Dawn Eclipse   Email Dawn Eclipse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dawn Eclipse

Krissa, I love it!  I loved the one on email too... but it seems to be the same one... but whatever.     I still say you have a gift, and you use it!  wonderful poem, and I can't wait to read another.

Cassie
JennyLee
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9 posted 02-13-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for JennyLee   Email JennyLee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JennyLee

With one hand and one heart
The scarlet path many tread
Can begin to clear
It's cold, barren soil
Free to grow dreams again.

Awesome piece Krista...I enjoyed every delicious word  


Jenny
Alwye
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In the space between moments


10 posted 02-13-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

Thank you all so much!  

 *Krista Knutson*

One lives in the hope of becoming a memory.
~*Antonio Porchia*~
WhtDove
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11 posted 02-13-2000 11:57 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

This verse just grabbed me...
The gunshots rip the sky
Slicing through the nameless
As we walk quickly by
Giving not a glance
As blood curdles at our feet.


Excellent work!



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There's only two ways you can go...
One way you can save your riches,
And the other will save your soul.
Rich Mullins
 
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