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Little river of my thoughts

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fool
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0 posted 02-11-2000 06:10 PM       View Profile for fool   Email fool   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for fool

I looked into your eyes
and they were empty places for me.
It filled my heart with sad waters,
and the little river of my thoughts
swelled
and swelled
till the river became a torrent
raging through my crippled skull
bursting past my defences
unstoppable
uncontrollable
all consuming
this river drowned my gasping hopes
my dreams clawed at its banks
but were sucked under
swept away
and lost
My love,
stood in the path of this deluge
naked and honest
defenceless
The sea of thoughts bore down upon my love
eager to consume it
All my visions of us
love,love making,tender whispers in the night,
my raging thoughts swept over them
battered them,smashed against them
mindless killing waves
of fear
of confusion
of hot anger
again and again
at last to recede
at last to concede
for as my thoughts swept past
an island in my mind still stood
the last essence of myself
my love for you.

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Rosalind Palafox
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1 posted 02-11-2000 07:28 PM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Rosalind Palafox

That is how i feel most of the time... great poem and metaphors.

 "Love comes but never goes, for if it ever went, it was never love to begin with."
Mistikman
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2 posted 02-11-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Great poem fool. What Rosalind said  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

 
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