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Twice Broken Heart
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Twice Broken Heart |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Why does it have to be so hard? Why can't she just say yes? Ever since I fell for her spell, My life has been a mess. Her smile could move mountains. Brilliant eyes, make me blush. When she enters my sight, My heart does turn to mush. What has caused these endless feelings, From which I can't escape? Invading my mind, thoughts of her, Leaving me poor of shape. When I asked her to go out, Her answer, it was No. My heart did die that day, Blood from which did free flow. Again I did pledge her my heart, More forceful than before, And again she did not want me, To love her any more. Now with heart twice broken, I will try once again. May this time it be Yes. Happy will I be then. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
Hope and heartbreak together in this poem, I really liked it  |
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Craig Member
since 1999-06-10
Posts 444 |
This one I like, I can't wait until you teach me meter!! Craig Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool: But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Keep hoping..and while you're doing that, don't forget to keep your eyes open... you never know when someone is standing behind you waiting for you to notice her! Good poem!  |
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Rosalind Palafox
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MemberPosts 88 |
You know a guy once had to try say, oh like uh.., 30 times and i ended up saying yes and i still love him to this day! The best love is love knowing that the other really desires the other and makes that person overjoyed...good poem "Love comes but never goes, for if it ever went, it was never love to begin with." |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Mistikman~ you are just so sweet. I am keeping my fingers crossed for you! Good luck! If it doesn't work out with her, you can bet there will be plenty to appreciate all your efforts......do keep your eyes open. -SEA |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
fool- Thanks Craig- hehe, is my meter actually correct on this one? wow Poet deVine- Yea I know, but right now I cant seem to think of anyone but her. *sigh* I hope this works Rosalind Palafox- hehe, a reason for me to not give up hope! SEA- Thanks for the support Maybe you are right. Would be nice I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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