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D'e J`a Vu
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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D'e J`a Vu  Again the ancient door creaks and groans pushing back dust barely settled from time immortal ~ Through swirling fog a distant light explodes with deafening twisting truths ~ The ground shatters beneath my feet as i hover helplessly above a boiling hideous vortex ~ The voice of truth explodes from above each shockwave progressively weights me down ~ I lift my legs to avoid the searing pain as nauseously blistered hands take hold ... ~ and my scream is but a gurgle ~ Unconsiousness welcome but never met the screaming pain still rising yet each fibre ripped apart to molecular particle ~ Riding the vortex of purification ... ~ Separating sins from soul ... ~ Then finally ... ~ Spit out the tail only to be caught by the uterine web With the voice of truth still taunting " better luck this time " ~~~ I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I love the eerie scene that you've created with this one...quite a bit to think about! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
O.K., I've read this threee times and it just keeps getting better. I love your imagery and alusion. A definate two thumbs up from me. Michael |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
This certainly invokes some food for thought!! Very well written and haunting in its delivery. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
Wow! If this is indicative of your talent, I need to read a lot more of your poetry. Great job! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Thanks everyone ... your kind thoughts are very well received ... I seldom write this style of poetry becuse there seems to be a larger call for laughter But since there are people here that like this type ... I'll see about giving more  Rex}<{{{{o> I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Almost seems as though no one is reading lately |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rex- You KNOW I like this ! I very much like it. What images you've set upon the page. Did I mention I LIKE IT ? ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Thanks Marge ... I don't always try to make people laugh ... Rex}<{{{{o> I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ooooh...Rex Allen, Rex Allen, how you have surprised me! This is SO ME! I love the imagery, I love the feel of it. I'm printing this one, if you don't mind. It felt like a present to me! You are SO good! more of this, please... |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Be careful printing serenity ... the vortex could pull all the ink from your printer Rex I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hay T-Rex, I'm not really quite sure on the SP but I guess that it will do, something they call poetic license I have but sometimes just to guess. But I like it, you have underlining emotions I feel that you'll in future project. Should I say I like it. Roll on my friend, Roll on I'll be reading to the end. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Rex, I enjoyed this greatly. Hope you'll still share your laughter with us too, as I enjoy that even more.  |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
thanks lucky and munda ... I guess I'm not feeling too happy these days I may not be writing much any more ... perhaps it's time to hang up my pen and go back to gaming on battlenet Rex |
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