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In Haunting Notes...........Posted a while ago, revised with help from Balladeer

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(I appologize for the lenght of this one, but I don't believe you'll be disappointed. I consider this to be amoung one of my best works. Thanks Balladeer for all your help in its revision )

In Haunting Notes

It was a brisk November night
When I rode into that town
Feeling saddle sore and weary
Looking only to bed down.

My clothes were dark with trail dirt
My chaps were wearing thin.
The wind was blowing from the east
And cutting to my skin.

Every hoof fall kicked up dust
Upon that darkened street.
I hitched up next to the saloon
To get a bite to eat.

My boot heels struck upon the wood.
Sounds echoed in the night.
The streets were bare and silent,
Not a single soul in sight.

Soft orange light reflected out,
Cast shadows on the ground
And from the depths of that saloon
I heard a haunting sound.

A voice so soft and full of grace
Was carried out to me;
The tantalizing notes she sang,
I simply had to see.

I entered through the swinging doors
And saw her standing there
In dress of red and deep blue eyes
Framed with auburn hair.

She looked at me and flashed a smile
That lit her entire face.
I wondered what a girl like that
Was doing in this place.

I bellied right up to the bar,
Then ordered up a drink.
Captured in the spell she cast,
I found it hard to think.

Her eyes caught mine across the room;
I couldn’t look away
And when she finished her last song,
She turned and came my way.

“Hey cowboy,  it looks like to me
You’re lonely and bone tired
And you should know, a girl like me
Prefers to be admired.

I got myself a room upstairs
Here in this one horse town.
I’ve got a bed just right for two.
You’re welcome to bed down.”

She smiled once more, I couldn’t speak;
She reached to take my arm;
Then led me to her room upstairs,
I, spellbound by her charm.

“Welcome to my home,” she said.
She opened up the door.
The room was dark, a single lamp
Cast shadows on the floor.

She led me to the bed and stood
Before me in the night
Slipped her clothes off,  piece by piece,
Outlined in dimming light.

Each sensual curve was accented.
She stood before me there.
I reached to pull her towards me,
Hands running through her hair.

A chain of gold graced her fair neck
From which a locket dangled.
She climbed in bed, right next to me,
Our bodies soon entangled.

We loved and talked all through the night.
I drifted off near dawn
And in the early morning hours
I woke to find her gone.

Hazy light was filtered in
Through a window marred with dust;
Next to me, lay on the bed
The locket dull with rust.

I picked it up and opened it
Where, much to my surprise,
I found a picture old and worn
That made me doubt my eyes.

The picture was in black and white.
It bore the test of time.
The face, though, that it held within
Was no one else but mine.

I had to find her, had to know
What this was all about.
I threw my clothes on in a rush
And from the room ran out.

I took the steps two at a time.
I had to find that girl.
But what I saw as I looked down
Caused my head to swirl.

The saloon lay still and empty.
Silence filled the air.
Old broken bottles packed the bar
Not a soul was there.

Tables and chairs were brown with rot.
Dust coated all with white.
But what I saw when I looked down
Was the most unnerving sight.

The floor lay thick encased in sand
That had blown in through the door
Disturbed by just my set of prints
Where ‘we’d’ walked the night before.

I ran outside to only find
The town stood in decay.
I jumped onto my waiting horse
And quickly rode away.

Years have passed, since that cold night
In that forgotten town.
Now on my stand, the locket rests.
Some nights I take it down.

I open it to see my face,
A picture from the past.
I’ve questions I can’t answer and
There’s no one that I can ask.

Sometimes at night, she calls to me
From somewhere in my dreams
And I’m forced to remind myself
All’s never what it seems.

So cowboy if you find yourself
On the trail some cold , dark night
And run into a quiet town
Where something seems not right.

Beware the girl with auburn hair
And mesmerizing voice;
Just saddle up and ride away
While you still have a choice.

She haunts the town, still in search of
A love lost long ago
And once you’re captured in her spell
She will not let you go.

Best mark my words, I see her face
Bathed in that dim light
Where in my dreams, she haunts me still
Every single night.



 Have you ever noticed
That the words...
"Goodbye"
"I'm sorry"
"I love you"
Are so easy to pronounce
...Yet so hard to say
~Javan
© Copyright 2000 Ruth Kephart - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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1 posted 02-11-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Superb... tremendous... excellent...
and I liked it a whole also...
what a great poem.
RainbowGirl
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2 posted 02-11-2000 09:50 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Hoot: Absolutely excellent..

HUSG

 The grape passes through the press to yield wine.
Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom..

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3 posted 02-11-2000 10:03 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Read like a book I couldn't put down, and the illustrations it drew were wonderful. Great from beginning to end.
JOY 14
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4 posted 02-11-2000 11:13 AM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Hoot,
You captivated me in your spell.  This was simply excellent.  A great story, just like BCS said, and one I couldn't put down, and didn't even want to end!  

Joy
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A great story and a pleasure to read. A fine job you've done making it seem real, or was it?
Danny
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Wonderful, wonderful!!!  You did a super job with this!  What a story and flawless presentation.  Can I make it into a short story???  
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7 posted 02-11-2000 02:18 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Just great, Ruth. My contribution was microscopic. This is all you...and worthy of all the praise  
Michael
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8 posted 02-11-2000 03:46 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Applause! Applause.  I love this work, Ruth.
Beautifully done.


michael
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Balladeer...thanks anyway, regardless of how little you think you did  

Wow...thanks for all the praise Mike  

RG...thank you

BSC...thank you, what a compliment you pay me  

Joy...nearly 150 lines, I think it's a good thing it ended when it did...thank you  

Danny....*smiles* well, the last time I looked I wasn't a cowboy, so it must not be true   Thanks

Martie...thank you and be my guest  

Michael...thanks my friend. Coming from you, the words mean a lot  
Andrew Scott
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Lady Hoot:  I'm looking for Rod Serling to walk out any moment.  Excellent tale. Top shelf material! As always, I bow to you and yours.
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11 posted 02-11-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Please Ruth bear with me, I'm out of time
I have to read this well done rhyme
Without the noisy dinner chime
But know that I'm in awe to see
That such perfect, excellent, brilliant and beautiful piece was done by thee.
I see your style is improved my deer
I also see a little Balladeer in here (very little   ) ((almost microscopic))
I guess the praise must go to you
While Mike only gets just an "So sweet and very Kind of you"
I know you know me well and inside out
"NICE POEM YOU TWO HAVE DONE" ...I would like to shout.
I can only take my hat and bow to thee
Hugs and Love  weehee




 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.  



[This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 02-11-2000).]
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Hoot Owl, this is a magnificent work! Absolutely captivating. Be proud of this!


Claire

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Scott....it is a bit Twilight Zone isn't it....thanks, wishing you and yours the best too  

Helmut...no wonder you spend so much time on here, so much thought and time in each lovely reply  

Claire...thank you very much  
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WOW.....*sits here with jaw touching the floor*...that was superb--I had to shake my head a little to get myself out of your captivating spell.  LOL      Excellent, excellent work.  

Bobbycat =^..^=
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Bobbycat...thank you  
cute sign on by the way  
=^..^=
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I like story poems. Yours is easy to read and enjoyable. Good job. Thanks.
Melton
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And to think I almost missed this one.  This has to go back to the top.  This had me captivated from start to finish.  Excellent job.  
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I echo what eloise said. I dont have time to read every post and seem to have passed this one by the first time. An excellent read hoot owl. It had me captivated from start till finish  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion

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Hoot  I love this poem,I did not want it to end ..heck I wanted to be there : )
Tasi
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Ruth what a chilling tale!  Most EXCELLENT my friend!

 <*\\\><

When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
hoot_owl_rn
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Thanks everyone  
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I wonder if you can write anything bad Ruth...
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breathe taking...the art of the mind that holds the mystery of life beyond life´s simplicity. This one´s unlike any I´ve ever red. you´re on top of the list!!! You deserve an award, for it takes a whole lot to make it than reading it. looking forward for more...
                  greetings from finland    
                            -C-
    
              
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24 posted 02-13-2000 11:11 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Ruth-
This is terrific !
You've woven a wonderful tale.
~*Marge*~



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