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Mary Lou

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Mike
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0 posted 02-10-2000 03:47 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

I walked along hot dusty roads, at end of summer day,
Feeling sorry for myself, no one with whom to play,
Exiled to my grandpa's farm, on Kansas plain untreed,
From the city had been sent, was one less mouth to feed.

Twelve years old in isolation, no children within sight,
So I wandered country lanes, in anger at my plight,
One day I came upon a house, rough hewn and poorly built,
On the porch a rocking chair, on chair, a faded quilt.

Through gateless fence, with peeling paint, I walked through unmown lawn,
It looked as if, no one was home, as if the owner's gone,
Then I heard a friendly voice, a girl with golden hair,
Calling from rope swing out back, from lone oak standing there.

"Will you come and play with me, I'm lonely can't you see,"
I ran and joined my new found friend, as happy as can be,
Suddenly my fate had changed, my exile now was pleasure,
As I played with Mary Lou, my newfound friend, my treasure.

Was getting late, was time to go, grandpa would be worried,
So said goodbye to Mary Lou, and down the road I scurried,
Grandpa asked what I had done, this hot and humid day,
I told him of my Mary Lou, and how with her did play.

With a look of puzzlement, grandpa scratched his head,
Said perhaps its getting late, for you it's time for bed,
The next day bright and early, grandpa called to me,
Let's go for a little ride, to see what we can see.

He drove me to a rough hewn house, with oak tree out behind,
Said let's take a walk out back, to see what we can find,
We came upon a little knoll, beyond the lone oak tree,
A tiny cross with words inscribed, that grandpa read to me.

"Here lies our daughter Mary Lou, who now resides in heaven,
The angels came and took her home, when she was but eleven."
Grandpa took my hand in his, as walked back to his truck,
Not a single word was spoken, was if the words were stuck.

As we drove away that morn, I turned and looked behind,
Not knowing what I thought I'd see, or if I'd lost my mind,
I saw a porch and rough hewn house, a quilt on rocking chair,
And on a swing in oak out back, young girl with golden hair.




[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-10-2000).]
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WilliamHugh
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1 posted 02-10-2000 03:51 PM       View Profile for WilliamHugh   Email WilliamHugh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WilliamHugh

That sent a shiver through my body. Truely amazing
devina
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2 posted 02-10-2000 04:15 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This was gave me the chills Mr. Mike!!!! This was a very effective tale!!!!

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3 posted 02-10-2000 06:15 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Chills and goosebumps!

Great poem!


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4 posted 02-10-2000 06:29 PM       View Profile for Adriahh   Email Adriahh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Adriahh

chills and tears, how sweet
Meadowmuse
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5 posted 02-10-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Mike, this is superb. I admire the ability you (and so many others here) have to write these story poems. This one is perfection, really. Eerie, too.  

Claire
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6 posted 02-10-2000 08:48 PM       View Profile for Ohme   Email Ohme   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ohme

Mike, this is truly beautiful.  
Martie
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7 posted 02-10-2000 08:53 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Mike, this is excellent and brought a lump to my throat.  Such a sweet, sad story and so well told.  Bravo!!!
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8 posted 02-10-2000 09:16 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

I'll have to agree with Claire on this one..I think the story poems are my favorite by far....and I love the way you've captured the innocence of the boy, the feeling of being "trapped"...excellent work!  

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9 posted 02-10-2000 10:56 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike-
You really brought it to life.
I like the way it moved.
~*Marge*~


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10 posted 02-10-2000 11:40 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Mike, I really enjoyed this from start to finish.  I felt like I was there in that yard watching.  Very skillfully written.
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11 posted 02-11-2000 12:06 AM       View Profile for Cuddlez   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cuddlez

That is what I call an thought-invoking poem. How sad for both the characters. Makes one think how the Grandpa knew who Mary Jane was? His former playmate, perhaps?

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.
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12 posted 02-11-2000 12:23 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Got a few chills with this one....good tale  
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13 posted 02-11-2000 01:18 AM       View Profile for Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Email Rosemary J. Gwaltney   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rosemary J. Gwaltney's Home Page   View IP for Rosemary J. Gwaltney

I'm sitting here with goosebumps all over, and my hair practically standing on end.  You have a talent that is outstanding.  What a gift, to tell such a story in poetry, and leave a person breathless!
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14 posted 02-11-2000 04:15 AM       View Profile for lucky   Email lucky   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lucky

Do I need to tell you that this is good... I don't think so. Keep it up bubba.
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15 posted 02-11-2000 05:10 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

That was one of the most beautiful poems I have ever had the plessure to read, and it also sent a judder through my body, there must be something about great poetry that touches us all deep inside, write more now .
Mike
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16 posted 02-11-2000 10:05 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I have to admit, this is one of my poems I had no idea where it was going when I started.  Was watching television and the first line popped into my head and it kind of flowed from there.
Thank you all for your comments.  If you are ever in Kansas, stop by and I'll introduce you to Mary Lou...  
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17 posted 02-11-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

The pleasure of meeting MaryLou just might be enough to entice me to visit Kansas... This is simply awesome, Mike..
 
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