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WilliamHugh Junior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 12MA |
I'm not sure where this stuff is coming from. Its so very much unlike me. Reading all you work has helped. With practice I hope I can write as well as you as all of you. Hopefuly I will have something else to write about one of these days... Thinking On springs sweet scent she came My heart took control The thinking was over Things we did wrong Things we did right Never once thinking we’re in for a fight We tried it before We’ll try it again Never once thinking this is where we’ve once been Tears spilled in anger Tears spilled in pain Never once thinking you may feel the same Nights I did suffer Days I stood strong Never once thinking this pain could be wrong Hearts can be broken Souls can be scared Now I am thinking could life be this hard Now’s a time for healing A time to rebuild Now that I’m thinking... [This message has been edited by WilliamHugh (edited 02-10-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I liked the topic...if you want help, you might want to have it moved to Critical Analysis and folks will be there to assist you with anything you wish... I enjoyed the theme of the piece. Thanks! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
I think this is a pretty good effort. The style is unique and it reads well, and carries the message. More will come to you so keep writing. Danny |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Thinking is a thing some people don't do it could be me, or it could be you... Enjoyed the poem! Thanks for the read! I'm not waving, I'm drowning! |
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amber Member
since 1999-06-15
Posts 240los banos, ca, |
this is a very good poem, and often the best when we dont know where the feelings are coming from. I have done this so many times and then looked back upon the poem and realized a lot of emotions that I never understood. Nice work. Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Pretty good! Did we rub off on you?  If so, it's been a pleasure! Nice to help with the creation of poetic talent! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
William- Thinking is a process that takes us where we need to be. I like thinking .... Now, I'm thinking that you did a pretty good job with 'thinking' this poem through. Nicely done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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