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WilliamHugh
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0 posted 02-10-2000 03:24 PM       View Profile for WilliamHugh   Email WilliamHugh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WilliamHugh

I'm not sure where this stuff is coming from. Its so very much unlike me. Reading all you work has helped. With practice I hope I can write as well as you as all of you. Hopefuly I will have something else to write about one of these days...

Thinking


On springs sweet scent she came
My heart took control
The thinking was over

Things we did wrong
Things we did right
Never once thinking we’re in for a fight

We tried it before
We’ll try it again
Never once thinking this is where we’ve once been

Tears spilled in anger
Tears spilled in pain
Never once thinking you may feel the same

Nights I did suffer
Days I stood strong
Never once thinking this pain could be wrong

Hearts can be broken
Souls can be scared
Now I am thinking could life be this hard

Now’s a time for healing
A time to rebuild
Now that I’m thinking...


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Sunshine
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1 posted 02-10-2000 03:40 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

I liked the topic...if you want help, you might want to have it moved to Critical Analysis and folks will be there to assist you with anything you wish...

I enjoyed the theme of the piece.  Thanks!

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Danny Holloway
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2 posted 02-10-2000 04:46 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

I think this is a pretty good effort. The style is unique and it reads well, and carries the message.  More will come to you so keep writing.
Danny
Echo Rhayne
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3 posted 02-12-2000 02:47 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Thinking is a thing some people don't do
it could be me, or it could be you...

Enjoyed the poem!  Thanks for the read!

 I'm not waving, I'm drowning!
amber
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4 posted 02-12-2000 03:01 AM       View Profile for amber   Email amber   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for amber

this is a very good poem, and often the best when we dont know where the feelings are coming from. I have done this so many times and then looked back upon the poem and realized a lot of emotions that I never understood. Nice work.

 Only after trying so hard to let go, did i realize how much i wanted to hold you forever> Amber and Ellis forever and always

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5 posted 02-12-2000 10:45 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Pretty good! Did we rub off on you?    If so, it's been a pleasure! Nice to help with the creation of poetic talent!
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6 posted 02-12-2000 11:27 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

William-
Thinking is a process that
takes us where we need to be.
I like thinking ....
Now, I'm thinking that you did
a pretty good job with 'thinking'
this poem through.
Nicely done.
~*Marge*~


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