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Corazon
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0 posted 02-10-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Corazon

she flowed out of the car
one smooth leg after the other
with liquidity and grace
her sex appeal dripped
from head to toe
as she poured
across the concrete
and at the crook of her finger
men splash at her knees
spewing words of undying love
begging for just one drip
and I look down
at my jeans
and comfortable shoes
and suddenly I don't feel...
wet enough

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-10-2000).]
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1 posted 02-10-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Corazon~ you have no idea how well I can relate to this. Wonderful! You did an excellent job with this one! I have felt that way most of my life. Thank you for posting this!   -SEA
suthern
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2 posted 02-10-2000 09:45 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well I feel like a damn desert!!! LOL. (Where's Toe... he'll solve that problem! *S*) This one packs a sizzle...
Danny Holloway
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3 posted 02-10-2000 10:00 AM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

This poem has a messge that says a lot about how men and women interact and explains many of the actions that come from how sex appeal is used and how men respond to it.
I believe this poem should be required reading for all passion participants.
Well, i'm thinking out loud and it's one man's opinion.
Well written!
Danny
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4 posted 02-10-2000 10:09 AM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

LOL...I had to look to see if I was in the right forum..

HUSG

 The grape passes through the press to yield wine.
Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom..

Corazon
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5 posted 02-10-2000 10:14 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

lol yep, have just had my world rocked lately and it seems I am questioning everything...
thanks all
LngJhnAg
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6 posted 02-10-2000 10:19 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Corazon, this is one terrific piece of writing.  The similes all fit together perfectly in the theme.  You nailed this one so well.  I love it.
devina
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7 posted 02-10-2000 12:49 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Her sex appeal dripped from head to toe...quite an image there!!!(are we in adult???lol)

This was wonderfully written...it just FLOWED gracefully m'dear...I loved it!!!


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Adriahh
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8 posted 02-10-2000 01:49 PM       View Profile for Adriahh   Email Adriahh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Adriahh

Surprising, nice..good flow  
Breathe~
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9 posted 02-10-2000 01:53 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Oh BOY!  Did it just get warm in here?...Yikes!

I just got done commenting to your "What ifs"...and then I see this...*picking herself up*..You bowled me over here!  This is GREAT!

)


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Corazon
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10 posted 02-10-2000 01:58 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

devina, thanks, flowing is a good compliment for this one huh? lol
lj, you know your compliments always mean much to me, so thank you much
Adriahh, thanks
breathe, I love your poems too, so this is nice to hear  
Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 02-10-2000 02:00 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Corazon,
Enjoyed this one very much.
Sunshine
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12 posted 02-10-2000 03:38 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Very interesting approach at describing our good days and our bad days...good job!  Enjoyed this very much.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow


Corinne
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13 posted 02-10-2000 04:08 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Corazon,

Looks like its raining all over the world!

drippin' with sensuality, this is!

Corinne
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14 posted 02-10-2000 04:13 PM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Well it looks like it`s back to the shower for me
Nice Job Corazon

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.
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15 posted 02-10-2000 04:31 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

From one who is washed up frequently, I can relate very well. I love the images. I can see them clearly in my mind.  
JamesMichael
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16 posted 02-10-2000 04:48 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Lovely, so lovely.  You got my heart all excited and pumping.   Ven a mi corazon.   James
Corazon
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17 posted 02-10-2000 04:56 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

thanks all, how funny this one is doing so well, it just flowed out...no working at it...lol sometimes those are the best

and jmlee...love that...thanks...but my whole name should be corazon espinado...sigh...got lots of healing to do....
Rex Allen McCoy
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18 posted 02-10-2000 05:09 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

Enjoyed this very much, Corazon
Leaves one wanting a second verse
or perhaps we can just drool one up ourselves

Rex}<{{{{o>
HelmutB
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19 posted 02-10-2000 06:57 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Nice poem you have created
For me beauty comes in many ways shapes and forms
And everybody has it
Wet or dry
That's through me eyes
Nevertheless, Well done Corazon.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

hoot_owl_rn
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20 posted 02-11-2000 12:01 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

I could see every bit of you....and from what I know of you, I think you could splash them all a bit  
Cuddlez
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21 posted 02-11-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for Cuddlez   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cuddlez

I loved it. It was fresh and entertaining. The title is really intriguing.

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.
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22 posted 02-12-2000 02:03 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

I agree with you, that some of the best poems are the uninhibited ones you just kinda throw out onto paper. I really enjoyed this. Definitely one poem that I know would be even more benefited by being read out loud. Thanks for sharing.

Mike
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23 posted 02-12-2000 08:43 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Corazon-
Liquid ... wonderfully done.
~*Marge*~


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24 posted 02-13-2000 10:30 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Yep - I love it...!!
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