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Corazon
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0 posted 2000-02-10 09:41 AM


she flowed out of the car
one smooth leg after the other
with liquidity and grace
her sex appeal dripped
from head to toe
as she poured
across the concrete
and at the crook of her finger
men splash at her knees
spewing words of undying love
begging for just one drip
and I look down
at my jeans
and comfortable shoes
and suddenly I don't feel...
wet enough

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-10-2000).]

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SEA
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1 posted 2000-02-10 09:45 AM


Corazon~ you have no idea how well I can relate to this. Wonderful! You did an excellent job with this one! I have felt that way most of my life. Thank you for posting this!   -SEA
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2 posted 2000-02-10 09:45 AM


Well I feel like a damn desert!!! LOL. (Where's Toe... he'll solve that problem! *S*) This one packs a sizzle...
Danny Holloway
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3 posted 2000-02-10 10:00 AM


This poem has a messge that says a lot about how men and women interact and explains many of the actions that come from how sex appeal is used and how men respond to it.
I believe this poem should be required reading for all passion participants.
Well, i'm thinking out loud and it's one man's opinion.
Well written!
Danny

RainbowGirl
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4 posted 2000-02-10 10:09 AM


LOL...I had to look to see if I was in the right forum..

HUSG

 The grape passes through the press to yield wine.
Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom..


Corazon
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5 posted 2000-02-10 10:14 AM


lol yep, have just had my world rocked lately and it seems I am questioning everything...
thanks all

LngJhnAg
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6 posted 2000-02-10 10:19 AM


Corazon, this is one terrific piece of writing.  The similes all fit together perfectly in the theme.  You nailed this one so well.  I love it.
devina
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7 posted 2000-02-10 12:49 PM


Her sex appeal dripped from head to toe...quite an image there!!!(are we in adult???lol)

This was wonderfully written...it just FLOWED gracefully m'dear...I loved it!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Adriahh
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8 posted 2000-02-10 01:49 PM


Surprising, nice..good flow  

Breathe~
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9 posted 2000-02-10 01:53 PM


Oh BOY!  Did it just get warm in here?...Yikes!

I just got done commenting to your "What ifs"...and then I see this...*picking herself up*..You bowled me over here!  This is GREAT!

)


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

Corazon
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10 posted 2000-02-10 01:58 PM


devina, thanks, flowing is a good compliment for this one huh? lol
lj, you know your compliments always mean much to me, so thank you much
Adriahh, thanks
breathe, I love your poems too, so this is nice to hear  

Seymour Tabin
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11 posted 2000-02-10 02:00 PM


Corazon,
Enjoyed this one very much.

Sunshine
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12 posted 2000-02-10 03:38 PM


Very interesting approach at describing our good days and our bad days...good job!  Enjoyed this very much.

 Sunshine
Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow



Corinne
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13 posted 2000-02-10 04:08 PM


Corazon,

Looks like its raining all over the world!

drippin' with sensuality, this is!

Corinne

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14 posted 2000-02-10 04:13 PM


Well it looks like it`s back to the shower for me
Nice Job Corazon

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.

Balladeer
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15 posted 2000-02-10 04:31 PM


From one who is washed up frequently, I can relate very well. I love the images. I can see them clearly in my mind.  
JamesMichael
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16 posted 2000-02-10 04:48 PM


Lovely, so lovely.  You got my heart all excited and pumping.   Ven a mi corazon.   James
Corazon
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17 posted 2000-02-10 04:56 PM


thanks all, how funny this one is doing so well, it just flowed out...no working at it...lol sometimes those are the best

and jmlee...love that...thanks...but my whole name should be corazon espinado...sigh...got lots of healing to do....

Rex Allen McCoy
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18 posted 2000-02-10 05:09 PM


Enjoyed this very much, Corazon
Leaves one wanting a second verse
or perhaps we can just drool one up ourselves

Rex}<{{{{o>

HelmutB
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19 posted 2000-02-10 06:57 PM


Nice poem you have created
For me beauty comes in many ways shapes and forms
And everybody has it
Wet or dry
That's through me eyes
Nevertheless, Well done Corazon.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


hoot_owl_rn
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20 posted 2000-02-11 12:01 PM


I could see every bit of you....and from what I know of you, I think you could splash them all a bit  
Cuddlez
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21 posted 2000-02-11 12:04 PM


I loved it. It was fresh and entertaining. The title is really intriguing.

 Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go.

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22 posted 2000-02-12 02:03 AM


I agree with you, that some of the best poems are the uninhibited ones you just kinda throw out onto paper. I really enjoyed this. Definitely one poem that I know would be even more benefited by being read out loud. Thanks for sharing.

Mike

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23 posted 2000-02-12 08:43 AM


Corazon-
Liquid ... wonderfully done.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Nan
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24 posted 2000-02-13 10:30 AM


Yep - I love it...!!
Corazon
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25 posted 2000-02-14 10:42 AM


thanks all, and hoot, yep, you might be right, its just I haven't been feeling it lately....hiding under a basket so to speak lol
bsquirrel....thanks, glad you liked...
nan  

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