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Elizabeth Santos
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0 posted 2000-02-10 09:17 AM


An Avalanche of Love

Bitter were the feelings
Held so deep within
Of a father who mistreated him
Whose love he could not win

His efforts never recognized
His failures overblown
So hungry was his tender heart
For the love he'd never known

Never a word of comfort
Or affection did he hear
So the bitterness inside of him
Just grew from year to year

He moved away and married
And raised a family of his own
Then one day he received
Some very sad news from his home

So far away he never had
A chance to say goodbye
And asked in sorrow why it was
His father had to die

The bitterness then diappeared
The pain he'd spoken of
And suddenly to his surprise
He was overcome with love

For the first time in his life
He came to realize
How much he loved the father
Who was so distant in his eyes

But still he felt void of love
And refused to even see
All the love surrounding him
In peaceful harmony

He was blind to the affection
His children felt for him
So burdened was he with
The childhood memories kept within

And through the years he often said
That in his hour of death
No one would be there to watch him
Take his final breath

No words, no consolation
Could wrest him from this view
So hard it was for him to feel
A love he never knew

Then came a rude awakening
A time to see the truth
To witness all the love that had
Been absent in his youth

An illness took him by surprise
And threatened his own life
And at his bedside stood
His loving children and his wife

Prayers poured in from 'round the world
Love and hugs and tears
And loving words from those
Whom he'd mistrusted all those years

Then finally he admitted
What he was thinking of
That his loneliness had turned
Into an avalanche of love

Elizabeth Santos




[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 02-10-2000).]

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SEA
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1 posted 2000-02-10 09:24 AM


Liz~ I'm crying now! ( big boo hoo's) This is so moving. I thank God I have a Super Dad. He didn't from what I can get from the family, and I guess his mom was no picnic either. I'm lucky, my Dad saw the mistakes and wouldn't repeat them. Excellent poem.-SEA
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2 posted 2000-02-10 09:50 AM


This is wonderful, Elizabeth!
LngJhnAg
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3 posted 2000-02-10 09:52 AM


Liz - this is a terrific poem, with a really deep message, and a warning for all of us who get caught in a cycle of denial.  Thanks for taking the time to sound a wake up call.  You do so well at reaching in taking hold of a person's thoughts.  Its an honor to post with you.
Danny Holloway
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4 posted 2000-02-10 10:13 AM


Isn't it sad that we sometimes hold back  love for others because of bitterness, pride, or selfishness.  Only, to discover that when all that really matters in this world is the love we have and how badly the one's we love need to have that love shared.
Your poem should be in the library of required reading.  It holds an important meaning for all of us.
DH

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5 posted 2000-02-10 10:20 AM


Elizabeth: Oh my...love costs nothing and yet I believe it's something that gives so much pleasure, makes such a difference to someone's life....well done, superb!

HUSG

 The grape passes through the press to yield wine.
Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom..


Martie
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6 posted 2000-02-10 11:02 AM


Liz, just wonderful!
WilliamHugh
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7 posted 2000-02-10 12:10 PM


That was a amazing.  Through the loss my mother I have learned to cherrish the time I spend with my father.
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8 posted 2000-02-10 12:45 PM


You made me all glossy eyed with this one Liz...sniff..sniff..it's often the case with parents, that didn't get loved enough as children...truly a beautiful poem and beautiful meanting

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Seymour Tabin
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9 posted 2000-02-10 01:32 PM


Elizabeth,
You are a fine poet and this is a wonderful poem. It made me think of my own relationship
Which is the essence of a poem. Excellent work. Love Sy

Seymour Tabin
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10 posted 2000-02-10 01:32 PM


Elizabeth,
You are a fine poet and this is a wonderful poem. It made me think of my own relationship
Which is the essence of a poem. Excellent work. Love Sy

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11 posted 2000-02-10 01:36 PM


Oh...this one made me cry...a little too close to home...

Beautiful poem... )


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12 posted 2000-02-10 01:39 PM


that was nice..
and, relative.
Adria  

jascanvey
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13 posted 2000-02-10 03:04 PM


Liz - this is lovely......*sniff*
Elizabeth Santos
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14 posted 2000-02-10 03:56 PM


I'm sorry to know that some of you have experienced this same thing. Obviously, the poem is about my husband. It is sad to bear a weight that is irrelevant to your present situation, and affecting all of those around you. hank you all for you responses. Again, it saddens me to know when somebody has been through this.
Lngjhn, danny and Rainbow, you explained it so well.
Liz

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 02-10-2000).]

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15 posted 2000-02-11 07:54 AM


Liz - The sentiments here are so universally true... It's nice to see them so eloquently spoken - If we can just understand in our own hearts that our parents are as human as we, and only capable of being who they are - we can learn to forgive their shortcomings and simply love them... Nicely done, my friend..
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16 posted 2000-02-11 08:00 AM


Elizabeth, my friend-
You have done justice to the feelings.
May Tony be constantly bombarded with
'An Avalanche Of Love'
Love you, lady.
~*Marge*~


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17 posted 2000-02-11 08:50 AM


This is a very powerful piece Liz...you've said a great deal in this one, well done as always  
ESP
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18 posted 2000-04-28 05:09 AM


Oh Liz, this poem is so....undescribable. How well you express the way of this vicious cycle. May Tony ever continue to feel an avalanche of love.

Love and hugs,
Lizzie


 "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight."

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