loves monologue (was: no title yet.. some idea?)

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Björn
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since 2000-02-08

Posts 23
Münster, Germany

0 posted 2000-02-10 07:44 AM

Hi, everybody!
I did this one this morning, so it´s quite fresh and I haven´t come up with a title yet.
I really don´t know if it´s any good but reading all your poems in the last days just made my fingers ache to write...

I am but one eternal thought
or would you rather call me feeling?
You won`t forget the lessons I´ve tought
nor the pleasures I send reeling
in your heart and in your soul
where is my garden and my rest

In every life I play my part
now as jester then as demon
I breathe my wish right to your heart
then as cure and now as venom
In your heart and in your soul
where is my castle and my keep

I am in you and the one you love
or loved, if thats my whim
I come to you as vulture or as dove
come as whisper or sound as hymn
In your heart and in your soul
where my will conquers all

My strength is mighty, I move the stars
or stop the world on my command
in my wake there might be peace or might be wars
I am the fairy with her magic wand
In your heart and in your soul
where I´m the lock and I´m the key

Now ask, my seeker, and I might tell
as pandoras box is nearly open
Think, and put your question well
or it might cost you more than a few token
of your heart and of your soul
where I`m the beggar and the king.

[This message has been edited by Björn (edited 02-10-2000).]

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

1 posted 2000-02-10 07:49 AM

Björn,
This is an exceptional piece of poetry. Gave me chills, had me looking over my shoulder...LOL I find myself at a loss in trying to give it an adequate title also...
but let me say again, great job.

Michael

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

2 posted 2000-02-10 10:10 AM

This poem is great, think of a good title for it, alot of the poem is in the title and it captivates and draws the reader to read on, brilliant .
If I could write that well I'd be laughing .

Corazon
Senior Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

3 posted 2000-02-10 10:18 AM

yep, was just in that same dilema, lol, wrote a poem in just a few minutes, but it took an hour of walking laps to finally come up with a title....and its hard for someone else to find one for yours, because if it is like mine, so many of the titles I thought of added to or changed the meaning of the poem...great poem BTW...and if I have any more thoughts on it, will reply back

or something simple...like ....I am...might work

[This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-10-2000).]

Björn
Junior Member

since 2000-02-08

Posts 23
Münster, Germany

4 posted 2000-02-11 03:22 AM

Thanks to all for your comments.
In times like these some kind words are all one can wish for

I´ve chosen "loves monologue" as titel. I think it fits the poem. (still I´m not so sure, see what some time will bring...)

To all nice weekend-wishes from germany!

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