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To Look Through Your Eyes...

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devina
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0 posted 02-10-2000 04:49 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for devina


I could break you with just one glance,
Perhaps I should- given the chance...

Inflict all the pain you've given me,
I'll make you love, make you believe,
Only to find that you were deceived.

Take your trusting heart in my hands,
Fill your soul with selfish demands,
Say things that you'll never understand,
Then crush you as only I can.

Drain you soul with bitter lies,
Until your pain you can't disguise,
Then leave you on your own to cry.

Or maybe I'll just go on with my life,
Cut down your ego(sharper than a knife)


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
© Copyright 2000 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
HelmutB
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1 posted 02-10-2000 06:15 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

The later would be my choise
If i had a say
But I'm sure everyone has they own way
Your poem nice it's done
I can surely say that I don't want to be the one
In neither case


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

JamesMichael
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2 posted 02-10-2000 06:50 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Devina this poem has such a beauiful flow.
I liked the line "crush you as only I can" and then you said "or maybe I'll just go on with my life."  very nice.   James
Dark Angel
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3 posted 02-10-2000 06:58 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Devina, I really enjoyed this piece, especially the last two lines.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


Michael
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4 posted 02-10-2000 07:09 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Wow, just the kind of uplifting poem I needed to hear right now....LOL  Just kidding, Devina.  This was very "sharp" to say the least - the last couple of lines really pack a punch.


Michael
Evad
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5 posted 02-10-2000 07:16 AM       View Profile for Evad   Email Evad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Evad

Devina:
What happened in your life?  Are you holding anything back?  I like your "passions"!
devina
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6 posted 02-10-2000 01:01 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Helmut- I'm not...scaring you...am I???? (I didn't mean the knife literally!!??)lol My pain has many channels of dealing...the main one being my poetry...thanks for the read m'dear!!!

James- thanks for that- I wasn't too sure about my flow on this one...anger was all I saw!!!G*

DA- thanks...the last two lines were VERY- debatable but decided on this, glad you like!!

Micheal- glad to send your spirits soaring!!! lol Sorry bout the bitterness...but a scorned female knows no bounds!!!! hehe

Evad- I hold back naught in my poetry...my heart's right there...if you were to read my past few...I'd unfold very neatly before your eyes...the soap-opera that tis my life!!! Thanks for the concern!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Corazon
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7 posted 02-10-2000 01:04 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

very well written, these emotions we do feel when the pain we need to heal  
jascanvey
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8 posted 02-10-2000 02:55 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

Oh yes, Devina, I've been here recently. Great how you got all that anger out! I like this
devina
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9 posted 02-10-2000 04:01 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Thanks you two...I do feel much better!!G**

If you see me venting yet again...please forgive!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Corinne
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10 posted 02-10-2000 04:04 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

Don't mess with Devina!

Love the power in this!


Corinne
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11 posted 02-10-2000 04:11 PM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

I would sure hate to be in his shoe`s.
Nice job Devina.....Im glad you didn`t decide to cut something else of his with that knife

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.
devina
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12 posted 02-10-2000 07:36 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

*Giggling* at that Corrine!!! Did I really sound so..mean???? lol

Wizzard- So now you're giving me new ideas, huh??? hehe...that's something to think about m'friend...


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
fool
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13 posted 02-10-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for fool   Email fool   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fool

I know the mindset
behind these thoughts lol,
good poem.
Rosalind Palafox
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14 posted 02-10-2000 07:45 PM       Edit/Delete Message     View IP for Rosalind Palafox

ouch!

 "Love comes but never goes, for if it ever went, it was never love to begin with."
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