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Can't live forever

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devina
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0 posted 02-10-2000 12:49 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for devina


To watch the candle burn down slowly-
To watch each ember dissolve-
into nothingness...forever...

As I lie helpless in this cruel world-
I realize I'm just one fragile being-
running through this maze of life...

Yet soon, my candle will burn out-
My ashes will blow away-
And nothing will move again...

Not one sign of life-
The world stands still-
So just promise me I won't be forgotten...

As the world moves on...


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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1 posted 02-10-2000 01:24 AM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Devina, I really liked this, thought provoking. Well Done!

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge


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2 posted 02-10-2000 01:28 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Devina-
This is simply lovely.
The image of the candle flickering
and dying out and yet it's beauty
begging for remembrance is pretty
gosh-darned powerful.
~*Marge*~


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devina
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3 posted 02-10-2000 03:06 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

DA- Was pondering the idea m'self tonight, glad to get you thinking right along with me!!!!

Marge- it takes one with writing power to see another's beauty...thanks hun!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Christopher
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4 posted 02-10-2000 03:09 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

I hardly doubt you'll be forgotten.
I think that's one of the greatest gifts poetry gives back to us, is a form of immortality!

BTW- Shouldn't you be in bed???  
devina
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5 posted 02-10-2000 03:15 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

I do believe my bed time expired right along with my ex-fiance dear Christopher-lol...so glad to see that you're concerned!!! G*

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
HelmutB
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6 posted 02-10-2000 05:55 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

A candle is burning for you here
I'm sure you'll be rembered
Such poem, such wisdom words carved in stone
Another true devina
Love it

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

devina
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7 posted 02-10-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Dear Helmut...your reassuring words are always my savior!!!! (hugs)

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Breathe~
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8 posted 02-10-2000 02:35 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

I'm sure you have touched many people...and will be remembered...

especially in this forum with your lovely poetry...

Keep the faith... )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
Beki
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9 posted 02-10-2000 02:41 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

I think this is something we all desire, to be rememebred, to have our life, in the grander scheme of things, mean SOMETHING.....good work.  
Corazon
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10 posted 02-10-2000 02:48 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

nice poem girl, I have been so busy trying to make my "right now" come out right that I haven't even thought of running out of wick, thanks for taking me there  
Danny Holloway
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11 posted 02-10-2000 03:11 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

devina, sure hope your candle doesn't burn out too soon, even though none of us know how long our candle will burn.  All we can do is live each day to it's fullest.  I met Dinah Shore many years ago and she had a saying "Life, be in it".  Never forgot that!
So, here's wishing that your candle burns brightly for a thousand years and the last thing you see before your candle goes out, is mine still burning.
All the best.......
Danny
Michael
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12 posted 02-10-2000 03:17 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

To live is to die.  To be remembered is to be forgotten, only at a later time, as death awaits us all.  Still, we all seem to want or need to know in heart that we've made some kind of impact or some difference to others while we were here.  You have done this already, devina, just by being yourself.  You will not be forgotten soon, I promise. - And you best not be dying any time soon either!!!  LOL

Lovely poem.


Michael
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13 posted 02-10-2000 04:07 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Breathe- thank you for the kind words!!!

Beki- exactly my thoughts!!!

Corazon- glad to make you thin dear!!!

Danny- that's a good saying to remember alright!! Tis my wish to see that too!!!

Micheal- I know it's inevitable...too many late nights of thinking I s'pose!!!

You promise???? Well if I'm dying soon, I sure don't want to know about it!!!!! G**


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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14 posted 02-10-2000 05:45 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

O devina, you'll never know how this poem has touched my heart.  My uncle passed on today, and he will always live in my heart.

Ricki Lee Jones wrote:  "You never know when you're making a memory..."

Judging by your words alone, you have made more than a few.  Forgotten?  No way!
devina
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15 posted 02-10-2000 07:16 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You're so sweet, I'm sorry about your uncle...but I'm sure he still lives in your heart!! hugs!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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