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Can't live forever |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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To watch the candle burn down slowly- To watch each ember dissolve- into nothingness...forever... As I lie helpless in this cruel world- I realize I'm just one fragile being- running through this maze of life... Yet soon, my candle will burn out- My ashes will blow away- And nothing will move again... Not one sign of life- The world stands still- So just promise me I won't be forgotten... As the world moves on... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Devina, I really liked this, thought provoking. Well Done! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Devina- This is simply lovely. The image of the candle flickering and dying out and yet it's beauty begging for remembrance is pretty gosh-darned powerful. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
DA- Was pondering the idea m'self tonight, glad to get you thinking right along with me!!!! Marge- it takes one with writing power to see another's beauty...thanks hun!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I hardly doubt you'll be forgotten. I think that's one of the greatest gifts poetry gives back to us, is a form of immortality! BTW- Shouldn't you be in bed???  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I do believe my bed time expired right along with my ex-fiance dear Christopher-lol...so glad to see that you're concerned!!! G* Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
A candle is burning for you here I'm sure you'll be rembered Such poem, such wisdom words carved in stone Another true devina Love it The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Dear Helmut...your reassuring words are always my savior!!!! (hugs) Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I'm sure you have touched many people...and will be remembered... especially in this forum with your lovely poetry... Keep the faith...  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I think this is something we all desire, to be rememebred, to have our life, in the grander scheme of things, mean SOMETHING.....good work.  |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
nice poem girl, I have been so busy trying to make my "right now" come out right that I haven't even thought of running out of wick, thanks for taking me there |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
devina, sure hope your candle doesn't burn out too soon, even though none of us know how long our candle will burn. All we can do is live each day to it's fullest. I met Dinah Shore many years ago and she had a saying "Life, be in it". Never forgot that! So, here's wishing that your candle burns brightly for a thousand years and the last thing you see before your candle goes out, is mine still burning. All the best....... Danny |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
To live is to die. To be remembered is to be forgotten, only at a later time, as death awaits us all. Still, we all seem to want or need to know in heart that we've made some kind of impact or some difference to others while we were here. You have done this already, devina, just by being yourself. You will not be forgotten soon, I promise. - And you best not be dying any time soon either!!! LOL Lovely poem. Michael |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Breathe- thank you for the kind words!!! Beki- exactly my thoughts!!! Corazon- glad to make you thin dear!!! Danny- that's a good saying to remember alright!! Tis my wish to see that too!!! Micheal- I know it's inevitable...too many late nights of thinking I s'pose!!! You promise???? Well if I'm dying soon, I sure don't want to know about it!!!!! G** Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
O devina, you'll never know how this poem has touched my heart. My uncle passed on today, and he will always live in my heart. Ricki Lee Jones wrote: "You never know when you're making a memory..." Judging by your words alone, you have made more than a few. Forgotten? No way! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You're so sweet, I'm sorry about your uncle...but I'm sure he still lives in your heart!! hugs!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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