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For The Fat Man

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 02-10-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

It may be redundant
but the talent's abundant--
he has what they're looking for.
Sampling cremes
chocolate supremes--
he's a fat man in a candy store.

Searching for the piece not tasted
nibbled morsels, lying wasted,
smashed and scattered on the floor
as the fat man eats some more.
Cakes, cookies, riches divine,
the fat man eats and wastes his time.
Devouring sweets,
he longs for meat--
to soak his fat tongue in fine wine.

Fat man in a candy store
can't find what he's hungry for...
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serenity blaze
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1 posted 02-10-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Gosh...If it's really this bad, please somebody post some suggestions...

There really was some thought behind this,
but I guess I failed to convey it.

Open to suggestions...Anyone?
Rex Allen McCoy
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2 posted 02-10-2000 05:42 PM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

I like this poem serenity
I can read a lot into it and implant myself in its' interpretation ... except I'm on a
steady diet ... but I like to read the menu
  
Rex}<{{{{o>


[This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 02-11-2000).]
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3 posted 02-10-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Oh my...I think it is wonderful...and I'm ashamed to admit I giggled a bit... (  then I realized it might be based on facts...

I hope this was not a real life situation...for then I will feel worse..


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
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4 posted 03-25-2006 12:22 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Yano, I would re-post this - to be honest it has a very strong message to send out, that they didn't get in 2000. I can see the crumpled wrappers actually, and they are many things.
 
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