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My Apology

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Echo Rhayne
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0 posted 02-09-2000 04:42 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I'm sorry that I love you too much,
that I made you the focus of my humble life,
and if I basked too much in your glow,
and drew strength too often from your spirit,
I'm sorry!

My devotion to you was inexcusable,
the attention I lavished on you, unforgivable.
If I cared too much, or admired too much,
or if my praises grew too loud in your ears,
I'm sorry!

I'm sorry if I made myself a burden
with my constant gifts, and offering,
and if the sound of my heart breaking
disturbed you when you finally walked away,
I'm sorry!


 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!


[This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 02-09-2000).]
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devina
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1 posted 02-09-2000 04:47 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

If you're having to apologize...he's definantly NOT worth you affection dear heart...

You know your own worth Mel...don't let him get you down....now smile!!??


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
serenity blaze
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2 posted 02-09-2000 04:50 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Sometimes people are just too afraid to tear down the walls to be able to love in perfect trust--you did nothing wrong...don't be afraid to try again.

(Geez, now look who's trying to cheer people up!  You guys are so GOOD for me.)

Echo Rhayne
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3 posted 02-09-2000 04:52 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

devina...Dont worry I am smiling brightly!!  This isnt about my boyfriend (just to clear that up)...it's about my father

Serenity...Thank you, but no need to try and cheer me up, things are fine, thanks *hugs*

 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!


[This message has been edited by Echo Rhayne (edited 02-09-2000).]
jascanvey
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4 posted 02-09-2000 04:56 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

Such a sad poem. Should we really have to apologise for loving someone who doesn't love us though? All is not fair in love and war  
BSC
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5 posted 02-09-2000 04:57 PM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Great poem, my immediate thought was of a good friend who I could have said these same words to recently.....
WhtDove
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6 posted 02-09-2000 05:29 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Phew, I'm glad you said that. I had a feeling but then I was wondering!  Melanie, don't apologize for the love you gave to someone that didn't care.  They are not worth your apologies sweet one!

 <*\\\><

When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
HelmutB
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7 posted 02-09-2000 05:36 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

I have to agree with WhtDove on this. But your poem is still nice and well done. Perhaps his life was not easy on him either, like it was not on my father who didn't know what love really is. Not that he didn't try, he just had no chance to learn. Nice work Melanie

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Wizzard
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8 posted 02-09-2000 07:05 PM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Very well written.
I think he`s the one that should be saying the sorries,NOT YOU.
It sounds to me like he`s the one that has suffered a loss,not you.



 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.
JamesMichael
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9 posted 02-10-2000 06:44 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very beautifully written Echo.  I also cannot understand why someone who you loved so much and tried so hard to please would just walk out of your life.  I mean there have been people in my life who I have mistreated so when they left I though, well now I am getting what I deserve.  Yet when I love someone and treat them wonderfully I don't expect them to walk out on me. Life is very hard sometime.  Take care.   James
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10 posted 02-10-2000 07:25 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Well done, Echo!!! If only loving someone insured they'd love you in return... *S*
angelswing
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11 posted 02-10-2000 07:31 AM       View Profile for angelswing   Email angelswing   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for angelswing

I think that your writing is wonderful, you obviously write from the heart .  
Michael
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12 posted 02-10-2000 07:52 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

"My devotion to you was inexcusable"  What a powerful line that is.  Such a shame we can be made to feel like this at all.  Can truly relate to the pain in this one, Melanie.  Wonderful poem.


Michael
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