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Soldier of Love - challenge

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jascanvey
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0 posted 02-09-2000 03:41 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for jascanvey



Beneath the worn exterior
Lies a heart that's known great loss
His memories are not faded
About the lines he had to cross.

The secrets are still held inside
No-one knows his pain
You can't trick him into telling
We've all tried in vain.

You are only left to imagine
At what horrors he has tasted
And grasp the meaning in his words
On how much life is wasted.

Now he sits and reads the news
And his eyes grow damp and sad
But I still hold the soldiers love
My dear sweet brave Grandad.
© Copyright 2000 Julie - All Rights Reserved
devina
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1 posted 02-09-2000 04:37 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This is sweet J....loved the ending, you added some personality to the challenge!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
just_another_fe
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2 posted 02-09-2000 05:01 PM       View Profile for just_another_fe   Email just_another_fe   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit just_another_fe's Home Page   View IP for just_another_fe

good poem i liked the ending a lot good job  
Adriahh
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3 posted 02-09-2000 05:11 PM       View Profile for Adriahh   Email Adriahh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Adriahh

That was sweet.
Sorry I'm new, not sure how much to say  
jascanvey
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4 posted 02-09-2000 05:20 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

Devina - thanks, just saw the challenge title and thought of my Grandad!

Angie - thanks, glad you liked it  

Adriahh - thanks for reading my poem and posting a comment. Welcome to the family at Passions  
Parker
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... the old black rum


5 posted 02-09-2000 07:44 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

Thank you for sharing this, it too reminded me of my grandfather. He's gone now but all the picture's I have of him were in uniform.

Parker
Justbleu
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6 posted 02-09-2000 11:42 PM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

This was a neat way to talk of a "Soldier of Love"!!  It is cool that the challenge reminded you of your Grandad and gave you inspiration to write about him!!  Good job!!     

Bridgette  


 Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."
jascanvey
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Parker - I'm honoured that you liked my poem enough to comment.

Justbleu - Thanks, that was the first challenge I'd responded to! I enjoyed it!

Beki
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8 posted 02-10-2000 02:43 PM       View Profile for Beki   Email Beki   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Beki

A well met challenge! I loved the twist at the end!
jascanvey
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Beki - thanks for stopping by. I do love a twist at the end of a poem!
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