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Soldier of Love - challenge
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Soldier of Love - challenge |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Beneath the worn exterior Lies a heart that's known great loss His memories are not faded About the lines he had to cross. The secrets are still held inside No-one knows his pain You can't trick him into telling We've all tried in vain. You are only left to imagine At what horrors he has tasted And grasp the meaning in his words On how much life is wasted. Now he sits and reads the news And his eyes grow damp and sad But I still hold the soldiers love My dear sweet brave Grandad. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is sweet J....loved the ending, you added some personality to the challenge!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
good poem i liked the ending a lot good job  |
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Adriahh Junior Member
since 2000-02-09
Posts 18 |
That was sweet. Sorry I'm new, not sure how much to say |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Devina - thanks, just saw the challenge title and thought of my Grandad! Angie - thanks, glad you liked it  Adriahh - thanks for reading my poem and posting a comment. Welcome to the family at Passions  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thank you for sharing this, it too reminded me of my grandfather. He's gone now but all the picture's I have of him were in uniform. Parker |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This was a neat way to talk of a "Soldier of Love"!! It is cool that the challenge reminded you of your Grandad and gave you inspiration to write about him!! Good job!! Bridgette Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Parker - I'm honoured that you liked my poem enough to comment. Justbleu - Thanks, that was the first challenge I'd responded to! I enjoyed it! |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
A well met challenge! I loved the twist at the end! |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Beki - thanks for stopping by. I do love a twist at the end of a poem! |
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