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A moment before nothing...

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Breathe~
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0 posted 02-09-2000 01:22 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Breathe~

Kneeling
my body drawn down
weighted by a sickened spirit
broken one too many times

Despairs arms beckoning
promised relief
Eagerly I crawl through the shells of my dreams
Trampling their corpses further
to wallow in her cold embrace

Hugging my knees in comfort
I am safe in my cocoon
sheltered by empty thoughts
Pleasantly numb to things that once mattered
I watch them now with deadened eyes

Wolves in human masks
tug hungrily at my heart basket
anxious to devour the contents
Disjointed faces
croon of my failures
laughing as I sit in the dust of my dreams

I ignore them
sliding towards the darkness
my walls thickening against normality
impenetrable comfort
Depression whispers softly
until I hear nothing
see nothing
I am nothing….




 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
© Copyright 2000 Denise Blackwell - All Rights Reserved
White Wolf
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Somewhere in the vast wastelan


1 posted 02-09-2000 03:31 AM       View Profile for White Wolf   Email White Wolf   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for White Wolf

Wow.  I have been there before..until someone came and yanked me out of my shell.  Nicely done.  You have captured the feeling well, atleast of what I remember of it.  You write well keep it up.  I look forward to reading more of your stuff.

 Poet:  An individual that can transfer what is in the heart onto paper.




[This message has been edited by Scorched Dragon (edited 02-09-2000).]
dash rendor
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2 posted 02-09-2000 03:33 AM       View Profile for dash rendor   Email dash rendor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dash rendor

I only read your poem because you didnt have any responses, but im extremely glad i did.  This poem reeks with dispair, but it embodies the true emotions that such dispair envokes.  I hate to wonder what could cause such dispair.  Hopefully you only write about these things and dont truly experience them.  I enjoyed this poem and i will definitly look for others by you.  
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3 posted 02-09-2000 05:56 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

The title intrigued me...the writing impressed. You've got some very potent imagery here. I'm looking forward to reading more from you!

Claire
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4 posted 02-09-2000 06:12 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Breathe~
After the moments of despair ...
H O P E.

Very well-drawn images
of the depth of despair.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Breathe~
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5 posted 02-09-2000 11:09 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Scorched Dragon...sometimes we have to hit bottom before rising...Thank you for your words...

dash...Well I am extremely glad that you did!  Let's just say that I am no longer in that state of mind...thanks to amazing people around me...this poem is just a rtoken reminder I haul out when I feel myself slipping...thanks for stopping in... )

Meadowmuse...Thank you!  I hope you DO read more... )

Marge...Marge...Marge...*smiling*

Hope can take us anywhere...if we let it...thank you so much!...You are such a kind lady... )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
BSC
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6 posted 02-09-2000 11:29 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Wow, you captured the essence of the nether side so well, been there, too often, so glad to be away from all of the "wolves in human masks" now, they only reside in that dark little place...great poem
Breathe~
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7 posted 02-09-2000 09:46 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Thank you BSC...I am very happy to say I haven't seen one of those wolves in a long time...*smiling*

 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
HelmutB
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8 posted 02-10-2000 05:20 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

There is always a light up on the horizon
A well done poem  
Now do write one that reflects you today
Very nice very deep

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Breathe~
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9 posted 02-10-2000 10:54 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

HelmutB...

Awwwww...I don't wanna!!!...*grin*  Well...I don't seem to express love as well..and I don't know why...but I did just recently do something concerning passion....would that do?   )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
LngJhnAg
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10 posted 02-10-2000 11:24 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Breathe... deeply... this is so deep - I enjoyed it, and I hated it.  I loved it, and I hated it some more.  This is a deeply moving poem.  Well done.
Corazon
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11 posted 02-10-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

yep, can ditto lja on this one...have been there...so I understand...very well written
Breathe~
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12 posted 02-10-2000 01:28 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

LngJhn...You know?  I love and hate this poem too...I hate how low I was at the time that I wrote it...but I also love how it also reminds me of how far we can come... )

Corazon...and may we never go back there again!   )  Thank you...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
WilliamHugh
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13 posted 02-10-2000 01:32 PM       View Profile for WilliamHugh   Email WilliamHugh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WilliamHugh

Great work, everyone can relate this to some point in their life.
Breathe~
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14 posted 02-10-2000 09:14 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

More often then I care to admit... )

Thanks William...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
bobbycat
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15 posted 02-10-2000 09:27 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

LOVED the imagery!!!! You can describe things and feelings perfectly....I'll bet you're GREAT at giving directions!!!!  LOL     

Bobbycat =^..^=
Breathe~
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16 posted 02-10-2000 11:08 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Acccck!  Uh...No comment!  *LOL*

Thanks bobbycat... )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
Nan
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17 posted 02-11-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

"I crawl through the shells of my dreams"... Very good line (and a good poem), Breathe...
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18 posted 02-11-2000 08:37 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Breathe~ I find myself looking for your poetry. This is a bad memory revisited for me.Love-hate yep,I loved it because it is so good, and hated it for reminding me of something I'd rather forget. Great job!   -SEA
 
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