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bsquirrel
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0 posted 02-09-2000 12:43 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

-lonely son-
A lonely sun in an only sky.
No one to sing a lullaby.
Why do you even try?
There are crumbs in the wine.

Mistakes dull like alabaster.
Faces hidden in the plaster.
Are you really your own master
Of what's pushing you to whatever faster?

Outside, Santa Monica breeze
Moving the fronds of palm trees.
Salty gritty taste of pleas.
Footprints form a nonsense frieze.

Or are those really dug-in psalms?
Your favorite note
Of your favorite composer's
Song?

Play along. Drink along.
Boy used to wonder about snow.
Feel fine. Fall free.
Now he wonders where the days go.

Lonely sun tints only pane.
Lonely son tips back his pain.
Fingers grip the glassless rain.
Drink it down; it's like cold flame.

Tastes like water turning to tea.
Was that a prayer or another plea?
How does it feel to be so like the sea?
Washing things away, colored dark, deeply.

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dash rendor
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1 posted 02-09-2000 03:49 AM       View Profile for dash rendor   Email dash rendor   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for dash rendor

I printed this poem up.  As far a i can discern, this poem is very deep and has a nice level of emotion.  However, i have trouble extracting all of the meaning from the poem.  Its sounds very very well written, and it impresses me a lot.  If you could post a little explaination or send me one via email i would greatly enjoy that.  (my email is mallow22@iname.com)  Thank you and very well done.
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 02-09-2000 05:51 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Excellently expressed...gives one the sense of futility. You've shared it well here. (...from one who can relate)  

Claire
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3 posted 02-09-2000 12:05 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

dash,
Glad you enjoyed it. I won't tell you what it means, because one of the beauties of poetry (and all art) is that it can mean so many different things to different people. Who's to say the creator's view is the right one? Thanks for your compliments of my writing.

Claire,
We all understand futility, sometimes. Hope things are going well for you.
devina
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4 posted 02-09-2000 01:53 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

you are soo right...people usually get different meanings from my poems as well...this was a very well written piece of emotion here hun...I enjoyed every minute!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Majestic
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5 posted 02-09-2000 02:02 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

very nicely written...it kinda grabs hold of ya and takes ya along on the ride...great job.

 "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~


Corazon
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6 posted 02-09-2000 03:14 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

ok, I understand most lines, but not sure about the whole meaning, I too am gonna save this one and go over it again later...  
oh and BTW I liked it...lol....if i failed to make that clear above...  
bsquirrel
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7 posted 02-10-2000 12:18 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

devina, Majestic and Corazon:
Thanks!  

Mike
Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 02-10-2000 03:29 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

I quite enjoyed this!  

 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!
bsquirrel
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9 posted 05-22-2002 07:35 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks. It's been so long -- god, ah remember writin' this while listenin' to BUSH. *shudder*

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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