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The Legend

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bobbycat
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0 posted 02-09-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bobbycat

Okay, I know this one is a little long (and a little corny), but I thought I'd post it to get some opinions....(I wrote it when I was 16, so please be gentle! LOL  j/k!)      

The Legend

big blue eyes
gazed into my soul
my heart she had grasped
in a captivating hold

why must I leave my princess?
I myself knew not the answer
one look into her brimming eyes
told me I had enchanted her

her heart, it was breaking
as mine was torn in two
and I whispered these words into her ear
"My dear, I love you."

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

warm brown eyes
gazed into my soul
my heart he had grasped
in a rapturous hold

why, oh why, must my young prince leave me?
I myself knew not the answer
one tearful glance into his eyes
revealed my feelings of forever

I saw his heart was breaking
as my tears fell like dew
and he whipsered these words into my ear
"My dear, I love you."

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

my princess was of beauty
a lovely sight to see
heaven shone from her very soul
and placed a smile on me

glorious red hair, delicate porcelain face
struck awe in the hearts of men
the king objected, for in his eyes
beauty was a sin

"Radiance leads to foolishness,"
he raged throughout the kingdom
"I'll have no nonsense in my palace!"
with that, his will was done

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

my prince was of splendor
a handsome sight to behold
eyes which melted my beating heart
his smile shone like gold

golden blonde hair spun like straw
caused jealousy in the young girls' eyes
my father objected, for he said,
"Too much beauty will lead to lies."

my happiness did not last
alas, not for long
my father's anger was clear, and he cried
that what we wanted was wrong

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

he banished me from his kingdom
before the sun was set
I told my princess this awful word
she cried, "Do not leave--not yet!"

she kissed my hands, she kissed my brow
as the sun danced on her hair
"I'll miss you, my prince," she whispered to me
this pain I could not bear

an idea occurred to me then
I told my princess what to do
"Wrap this cloak 'round your shoulders
and no one will discover you."

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

my prince told to leave the land
so under a tree we met
I was losing my one true love
I tried, to no avail, not to fret

I gave him a kiss upon his brow
his hands, so light and fair
"I'll miss you, my prince," I whispered to him
how would he know I care?

a precarious plan crept upon my prince
he told me what to do
"Wrap this cloak 'round your shoulders
and no one will discover you."

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

she drew the cloak over her body
I knew then it was truly her I need
my heart skipped a beat with my love for her
we were meant to be together indeed

she carried a tear in her eye
as she looked back at the land
I thought of all she was leaving behind
as I took her trembling hand

big blue eyes gazed into mine
I listened to the palace noise
she smiled at me and I admired her
for all her strength and poise

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I drew the cloak over my body
then joined him on his steed
with one last glance at my father's kingdom
I knew his will I could never heed

a lone tear rose to my eye
I brushed it with my hand
one lesson I had learned from the king:
only the love of my prince is grand

warm brown eyes gazed into mine
my heart danced at his voice
I turned to my prince and smiled at him
knowing I had made the right choice.

© Copyright 2000 Christina L. Petrosky - All Rights Reserved
Mistikman
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1 posted 02-09-2000 12:13 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Hey, further proof that age does not determine poetic skill   Well done bobbycat, I loved it  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Shelley
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since 01-27-2000
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2 posted 02-09-2000 12:13 AM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

I love this! It flows so nice. And i like how you showed both sides of the situation!
Quite a piece for a 16 year old to write.
GOOD JOB!
Breathe~
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3 posted 02-09-2000 02:15 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Wish I could write like that at 16...*grin*

Nice job bobbycat!


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