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Romance is in the Rain

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devina
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0 posted 02-08-2000 11:32 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for devina

I shiver in remembrance,
Of that special misty night-
The many hours of holding,
Very much to my delight.

Heaven’s own love drops,
To fall upon our skin,
Creating such romance-
No beginning and no end.

There with you darlin,
Was far beyond compare-
Soaked from head to toe-
All I could do was stare.

Wrapping limbs around you,
So pleasing to my eyes,
Marveling at your warmth,
‘Twas pleasure not denied.

We ended late that night,
Kissing our good-byes,
Promising to meet again,
Beneath the rain filled skies.



 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


[This message has been edited by devina (edited 02-09-2000).]
© Copyright 2000 Tanya Nicole Bustamante - All Rights Reserved
Paul Hoekman
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1 posted 02-08-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Paul Hoekman   Email Paul Hoekman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Paul Hoekman's Home Page   View IP for Paul Hoekman

Beautiful as always!
Devina
Forget the umbrella!
First__Knight
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2 posted 02-08-2000 11:35 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Oh Devina how romantic....I just love long walks in the rain.  Don't know if is was cause mom said not to....or just the playing and getting wet with someone special    thanks for reminding me how special it can be

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.

Parker
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3 posted 02-08-2000 11:37 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

devina, I know its not raining yet, but here I am. You paint it so wonderfully just the way I remember it, last night in my dreams.

Parker
Mistikman
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4 posted 02-08-2000 11:38 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Oh, it has been my experience that the best time to do anything outside short of sunbathing is when it is raining! good job, devina, I enjoyed this  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Shelley
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5 posted 02-08-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for Shelley   Email Shelley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Shelley

You have such a beautiful way of expressing yourself. This caresses my mind when I read it. Very nicely done!
HelmutB
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6 posted 02-09-2000 06:40 AM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Is there more to add?
Let's get going into the rain of lovers hearts
Such wet but beautiful poem, a true one
Ps gotta run catch the rain  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 02-09-2000 06:54 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Devina-
This is just so refreshing !
Much like the spring rains on a day in May.
It appears to me that you are writing with your heart .... I like it.
~*Marge*~


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JamesMichael
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8 posted 02-09-2000 07:14 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

I like this Romance in the Rain devina.  Especially "creating such romance, no beginning and no end.  A lovely, lovely poem and now I am looking for the rain.  James
Toerag
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9 posted 02-09-2000 08:32 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Devina....nicely done gal.....nice pic too.....I made love in the rain once....(then it turned to hail)....figures.....
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10 posted 02-09-2000 08:42 AM       View Profile for Evad   Email Evad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Evad

Devina:
I have always wanted to make love in the rain.  This will now make me want to even more.
Thank you for sharing this with me.
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11 posted 02-09-2000 09:10 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Devina, this is so romantic! Beautifully written. Making love in the rain is something everyone should try at least once   -SEA
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12 posted 02-09-2000 11:59 AM       View Profile for vandana   Email vandana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for vandana

Beautiful written!!!!!
devina
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13 posted 02-09-2000 01:39 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Paul- Glad to see you sweetie!

First Knight- Maybe this is ONE time not to listen to our mothers, you cant get sick if there's someone to keep you warm!!

James- my dear...you flirt shamelessly!!!!! But you do it soooo good!!!

Mistiman- you're so right!!

Shelley- Thanks for the compliment!!!

Helmut-We've gotten a little rain in California, but I'm waitin' for a downpour dear!!! he he Then we'll have some fun!!

Marge- It's always from the heart m'dear, thanks for feeling it!!!

James- Hope your rain comes soon!!!

Lol@you Toe....you were probably just so GOOD that God had to stop you before you hurt yourself!!!!he he

Evad- go for it...tis a wonderful experience!!!

SEA- so right you are hun!!!

vandana- thank you!!!!



 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Skyfyre
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14 posted 02-09-2000 02:30 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

devina, m'dear, you have penned the stuff of secret fantasies, here -- I enjoyed the poem and the images it brought with it ...

I do, however, have one suggestion regarding phrasing: in the first line, you might consider replacing "shudder" with "shiver," as the former has negative connotations that do not mesh with the intent of this piece.  For example, you might "shudder" in disgust, but you would "shiver" with delight.

Just my two cents -- thank you for the read, it was very -- erm -- refreshing!  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

devina
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15 posted 02-09-2000 02:53 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

You know Kess...now that I look at that you're right..thanks hun..just for you..it's changed!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Danny Holloway
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16 posted 02-09-2000 03:06 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

Promises so sweet,
promises to keep,
promises kept only in my sleep.

Well done Lady, your work never disappoints!
Danny
devina
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17 posted 02-09-2000 04:19 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

My thanks Danny...
the heart can speak many a words...
if only there's someone to listen!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
serenity blaze
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18 posted 02-09-2000 05:22 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Mmmm...Fog is very nice too!  and sunshine,
partly cloudy,  daytime, nighttime...
Corazon
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19 posted 02-09-2000 05:29 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

like this lots, have never done this, lol, but then I am not dead yet either *giggles*
great poem  
Parker
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20 posted 02-09-2000 07:41 PM       View Profile for Parker   Email Parker   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Parker's Home Page   View IP for Parker

devina,
I've been listening to the song of a fallen angel.     
It paints of hearts turned lightly blue.
and you whose wings are so unstable,
I give a hug to help you through.



Parker
Elizabeth Santos
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21 posted 02-09-2000 07:44 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Wonderful poem!
Very romantic, just how I like them
(And incidently, Skyfire's two cents are worth gold)
Liz
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22 posted 02-09-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Simplistic, fluid, dripping with romance...perfect!

Claire
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23 posted 02-09-2000 08:02 PM       View Profile for fool   Email fool   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for fool

I love the last Stanza,
pure romance,just lovely  .
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24 posted 02-09-2000 08:14 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

This is great, Devina! I've never tried it either.......er, does mudwrestling count?  
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