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First__Knight
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0 posted 02-08-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for First__Knight


Let Down
~First Knight~


My heart can not bear, of not being there.
Just sitting by your side.
It rings so true, the words I miss you,
Just hoping you've not lied..
You said it was right, only just last night,
my feelings in such despair.
Tears in my eyes, feelings oh that rise,
and it just does not seem fair.
What can I do? I don't have a clue,
of how your feeling inside.
I'm lost in space, an utter disgrace,
now with feelings that I've died.


 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.

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Mistikman
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1 posted 02-08-2000 10:52 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Excellent poem First_Knight. The image of you sitting alone wanting her is incredibly vivid. Might I ask exactly what prompted this poem, if it is not too personal?

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
First__Knight
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2 posted 02-08-2000 10:56 PM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

The poem is about meeting someone who you love.  You know when you want to see them each day.  And one day they don't show up and your are not sure if it was something you said...or failed to say.  It's that sitting there wondering....that loss.  Being alone,  Crying.

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.

Mistikman
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3 posted 02-08-2000 11:01 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Ok, thanks   I wasnt sure and didn't want to  jump to any wild conclusions. The poem makes more sense (to me at least) now that I know to what you were referring  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Marilyn
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4 posted 02-08-2000 11:18 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

Ahh my friends always jump to conclusions too fast. They always seem to think that they have been put aside or they have done something wrong. How do you know she didn't have server problems or the chat program failed to log her on or she was called away to work or an emergency. I know that my server was down the other night, that could have been her problem as well. You never know these things. Why suffer such pain when you do not have the answers? (Just my thoughts... )
First__Knight
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5 posted 02-09-2000 02:42 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Thank you Mistikman.

And Lady Marilyn...no conclusions ...Just expressions  

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.



[This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 02-09-2000).]
Breathe~
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6 posted 02-09-2000 02:49 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

It's so hard when you are left to fill in the blanks... )  

Hang in there... )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
First__Knight
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7 posted 02-09-2000 04:59 AM       View Profile for First__Knight   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for First__Knight

Ah....an understanding soul.....thank you Breathe

 There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it.

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8 posted 02-09-2000 06:08 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

David-
I like the way you wear your heart.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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JamesMichael
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9 posted 02-09-2000 07:21 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

First knight I think you're down but not out.  

A little patience would give her heart
some time to discover,
does she love you
or is she longing for another.
And your heart could use a little time too
and give this romance a chance to come to you.  (laugh)

A very enjoyable poem,   James
hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 02-09-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

David,
It wasn't that she didn't want to be here, but rather that she wasn't online at all last night due to the fact she slept only about 1 1/2 hours all day and was sick. But....you could have e-mailed her, I'm sure she would have appreciated hearing from you one way or another. This makes me rather sad, because it seems it's okay for you to lose contact for days at a time and her, only one night We must not jump to conclusions, it hasn't served either of us well in the past
Ruth
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11 posted 02-09-2000 08:43 AM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Things are never as bad as our thought`s make them out to be.
I hope everything works out ok for you.
Good Luck  

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.
jascanvey
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12 posted 02-09-2000 04:03 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

A sweet poem, but I think she's just trying to catch up on sleep after she's been on-line chatting to you constantly! Either that or she's catching up with her girlfriends (and we all know how many questions they ask!!) Fingers crossed, you'll be okay!    

[This message has been edited by jascanvey (edited 02-09-2000).]
devina
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13 posted 02-09-2000 04:51 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

David
Things will work themselves out for you two...patience and understanding- lovebirds, and all will be well!!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Echo Rhayne
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14 posted 02-10-2000 04:57 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Im just not going to touch this one with a 10 foot pole LoL

 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!
tracie66
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15 posted 02-11-2000 03:21 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

David what a beautiful poem but so sad   you wrote this so well, the pain can be great can't it but it makes us stronger in time.   Tracie
 
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