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Burning Blade

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Meadowmuse
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Burning Blade



Sounds of sorrowful moments burn
My slumber awakened to horror's turn
Keep not doubt's darkness from his eyes
Once filled with lust and labored lies

And I, for nearing love's domain
Am punished within his brutal, feigned,
Dominion soft, with edges lanced
Seduced and soothed by deception's dance

Though every slice of burning blade
Will caress with ice each breath I draw
And through tears and treasures I have paid
His arctic heart refuses thaw.

Dear LadyClaire



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JamesMichael
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1 posted 02-08-2000 06:31 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Very nice Meadowmuse.  Now concerning this line "seduced and soothed by deceptions dance".  How were you seduced and how were you soothed, if you don't mind telling me. James
HelmutB
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2 posted 02-08-2000 06:38 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Well lets see
We need a candle definetly a candle
Than we need a fire place, for sure a fire place
Then we need a blanket, can't so without a good old blanket
I' sure that will melt the artic heart  

Sad inside but yet so fine
Well pose in line and rhyme
Powerfull the statement hidden under ice
I did do read this twice
Lovely just plain lovely (perhaps not plain at all)  
Hugs to you dear Claire
Thanks for sharing



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

Skyfyre
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4 posted 02-08-2000 07:12 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Been there, done that -- there many hearts less cold.  Well done, Claire.  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Mistikman
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5 posted 02-08-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Great poem  
I have a great warm heart if you or anyone ever wants to talk, but for now, my heart is only for borrowing, I will not give it away just yet  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion


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Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 02-08-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Claire
You've captured here the vision twice
The one of fire, the one of ice
With words you wield a burning knife
To warm the passions in your life
If you can't win with this device
Ain't nothin' going to melt that ice!
Beautuful!
Liz
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 02-08-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Meadow,
Ya know some things spoil if you take them out of the freezer. But your poem is delicious. Sy
Rex Allen McCoy
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May you find the heart that's always been searching for yours ...

Rex}<{{{{o>
Majestic
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9 posted 02-08-2000 09:21 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

what beautiful writing....

Hence forth and ever after,
Seek ye love..Nay, not love;
Seek ye True Love...that thy
heart may be warmed.

 "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~


Meadowmuse
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10 posted 02-08-2000 10:17 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Thanks to all who have responded...for reading, and for the encouragement. Very earnestly appreciated tonight.

Claire
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11 posted 10-22-2000 03:14 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

"His arctic heart refuses thaw"...I shivered when I read that, thinking how cold he must be. Good work Claire!

Elizabeth


You cling to your ways and leave mine to me.
Suum cuique.
~Elizabeth


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