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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-02-08 06:09 PM



Burning Blade



Sounds of sorrowful moments burn
My slumber awakened to horror's turn
Keep not doubt's darkness from his eyes
Once filled with lust and labored lies

And I, for nearing love's domain
Am punished within his brutal, feigned,
Dominion soft, with edges lanced
Seduced and soothed by deception's dance

Though every slice of burning blade
Will caress with ice each breath I draw
And through tears and treasures I have paid
His arctic heart refuses thaw.

Dear LadyClaire




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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2000-02-08 06:31 PM


Very nice Meadowmuse.  Now concerning this line "seduced and soothed by deceptions dance".  How were you seduced and how were you soothed, if you don't mind telling me. James
HelmutB
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2 posted 2000-02-08 06:38 PM


Well lets see
We need a candle definetly a candle
Than we need a fire place, for sure a fire place
Then we need a blanket, can't so without a good old blanket
I' sure that will melt the artic heart  

Sad inside but yet so fine
Well pose in line and rhyme
Powerfull the statement hidden under ice
I did do read this twice
Lovely just plain lovely (perhaps not plain at all)  
Hugs to you dear Claire
Thanks for sharing



 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap
4 posted 2000-02-08 07:12 PM


Been there, done that -- there many hearts less cold.  Well done, Claire.  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


Mistikman
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5 posted 2000-02-08 07:18 PM


Great poem  
I have a great warm heart if you or anyone ever wants to talk, but for now, my heart is only for borrowing, I will not give it away just yet  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion


[This message has been edited by Mistikman (edited 02-08-2000).]

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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6 posted 2000-02-08 07:39 PM


Claire
You've captured here the vision twice
The one of fire, the one of ice
With words you wield a burning knife
To warm the passions in your life
If you can't win with this device
Ain't nothin' going to melt that ice!
Beautuful!
Liz

Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2000-02-08 07:39 PM


Meadow,
Ya know some things spoil if you take them out of the freezer. But your poem is delicious. Sy

Rex Allen McCoy
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8 posted 2000-02-08 09:12 PM


May you find the heart that's always been searching for yours ...

Rex}<{{{{o>

Majestic
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9 posted 2000-02-08 09:21 PM


what beautiful writing....

Hence forth and ever after,
Seek ye love..Nay, not love;
Seek ye True Love...that thy
heart may be warmed.

 "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~



Meadowmuse
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10 posted 2000-02-08 10:17 PM


Thanks to all who have responded...for reading, and for the encouragement. Very earnestly appreciated tonight.

Claire

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11 posted 2000-10-22 03:14 PM


"His arctic heart refuses thaw"...I shivered when I read that, thinking how cold he must be. Good work Claire!

Elizabeth


You cling to your ways and leave mine to me.
Suum cuique.
~Elizabeth



Janet Marie
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12 posted 2000-11-08 10:39 AM


adding to library file  
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