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Candle In The Sky

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Eloise
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0 posted 02-08-2000 06:04 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Eloise

As I gaze up to the heavens above,
I think of you and then I cry.
I know that you are watching me.
As you light your candle in the sky.

Why did He take you away that night?
Why did you have to die?
Together forever you said we would be.
As you light your candle in the sky.

Where is it that I go from here?
The days and nights pass slowly by.
I've never been alone before.
As you light your candle in the sky.

I really need to talk to you.
So I raise my voice up high.
I know you're trying to tell me something.
As you light your candle in the sky.

So many years together,
Was a lifetime for you and I.
But I know you're still by my side.
As you light your candle in the sky.

Soon I know we'll meet again.
I feel your presence nearby.
Hand in hand we'll walk real soon.
Then we'll light our candles in the sky.
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Mistikman
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1 posted 02-08-2000 06:34 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

This was beautiful Eloise. A great tribute to the loss of someone special.

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Meadowmuse
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2 posted 02-08-2000 06:56 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Eloise, you've expressed so well the pain of the loss of a love...the confusion, the questions, the feeling of being left alone, and the repeating line ~

"As you light your candle in the sky."

serves well to convey the strength of your faith. Wonderful poem!

Claire
Eloise
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3 posted 02-09-2000 12:15 AM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

Mistikman and Claire, thank you both for reading and your kind comments.
JamesMichael
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4 posted 02-09-2000 07:41 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

This is a beautiful description of what you have gone thru.  I hope you are alright.  I liked the way you progressed to candles in the sky in the last line.  An enduring hope.  James
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5 posted 02-09-2000 08:05 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Eloise-
Now you just KNEW I'd like this one.
You've done a wonderful job lighting the sky with candlelight.
What poignant thoughts.

Such a marvelous image comes to me as I look at a night sky filled with the flickering of the candles of loved ones.
Thank you, my friend.  Thank you.
~*Marge*~



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Wizzard
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6 posted 02-09-2000 08:50 AM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

I can see that the two of you have a never ending bond,and the love that you two share really show`s in your word`s here.
May your Heart`s again be as one,but not to soon because we still need you down here.
God Bless  

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.

[This message has been edited by Wizzard (edited 02-09-2000).]
Eloise
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7 posted 02-09-2000 01:48 PM       View Profile for Eloise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Eloise

James, thanks for your kind words and concern but this was actually written for my friend's mother a few years ago.  

Marge, I'm so glad that you liked it.  And there is comfort in knowing that there are those flickering candles burning up there.

Thank you also Wizzard for your kind words.  And welcome to Passions.  
Echo Rhayne
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8 posted 02-10-2000 04:48 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Eloise, wonderful poem that is sure to give anyone who has lost someone special a ray of hope!  Beautifully said!

 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!
 
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