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Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 2000-02-08 02:32 PM


Two-thirty in the morning
I started on my way
I could have used a little sleep
but I made it through okay

Six hours of driving
two quick stops for gas
both my legs were very numb
not to mention my ***

Seventy-five miles per hour
cruising on interstate ten
passing all the truckers
never to see any of them again

Five-thirty in the morning
the sun was starting to rise
six-fifteen, the sun was up
and shining in my eyes

Eight-thirty in the morning
nine-thirty Phoenix time
and hey I'm sorry to say
this isn't the end of the rhyme

I showed up in their driveway
they seemed glad that I was there
immediately I tacked up Sassy
their seventeen hand mare

I then tacked up Chance
he's the one they wanted me to ride
my only concern now is that
Im not under or over qualified

I drove over to my friends house
who I hadn't seen in years
when I walked up I surprised them
to the point they were in tears

We talked about our memories
way into the night
they were going out to dinner
and invited me for a bite

Although I didn't eat a thing
we had a darn good time
and if you're sick of reading this, Im sorry
but it's still not the end of the rhyme

I finally left my friend's house
a quarter after four
the tears started pouring out
as I walked out their door

I decided not to stay in Phoenix
so these people and I are gonna keep in touch
if they want me for the job, I'll go back
cause I want this job so much

Four-thirty in the evening
I headed back for home
nine-thirty Cali time I was back
and I've finally finished this poem

(Now I get to wait to find out if they want me for the job or not, so until then, ya'll get to put up with me some more *evil laugh*)


 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*


© Copyright 2000 Echo Rhayne - All Rights Reserved
Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
California
1 posted 2000-02-08 02:38 PM


Well, Melanie, I wasn't exactly sure where you had went, being gone until yesterday myself.  Glad to read this poem.  hope all works out for you and no matter where you are - I hope you are on these forums still so we will always have to put up with you...LOL  


Michael

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 964
Canada
2 posted 2000-02-08 02:40 PM


Well I sure keep my fingers crossed and wish good luck
Don't forget your hockey puck
The fishing rod there for the bass
Then at least you sit a bit longer on your ...  
Well done
I guess I can get used to having you around for a bit longer


 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.


SEA
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with you
3 posted 2000-02-08 02:41 PM


Echo~ sounds like a nice trip! I hope you get the job! I wish you good luck!( xxxxx-fingers crossed for you!   )
If I may ask, what part of California are you from?( I'm a Cali girl too ) Loved the poem!   -SEA

Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA
4 posted 2000-02-08 02:52 PM


Michael, if you want to the whole ordeal about where I was, there is an post in Announcements and Links called Im leaving!  

Helmut, hehe thanks, but you guess you can get used to it?? hehe kewl

SEA, Er Snoozeville, USA LoL, a.k.a Santa Clarita ... home of Six Flags Magic Mountain!!  *YUK*  yourself?


 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*


SEA
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5 posted 2000-02-08 02:54 PM


Echo, well, I'm by Sacramento, in the mountains. It's beautiful here, we are above the smog!   -SEA
Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

6 posted 2000-02-09 04:59 AM


Loved your "rhyme" Echo.   Sounds like you've got a winning attitude...(I could just imagine you flying down the highway ) Welcome home!

Claire

Toerag
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since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622
Ala bam a
7 posted 2000-02-09 08:26 AM


I hope ya get the job,
And ya make a zillion bucks,
But next time make it interesting,
"Flash" the guys in their trucks.

Flash a little leg,
Or a breast or two,
Then you'll have some company,
Cuz they'll surely follow you.

Evad
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since 2000-02-08
Posts 12

8 posted 2000-02-09 08:54 AM


Echo:
I love your sense of humor!  You find the things that are really important in your life!

Wizzard
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since 2000-02-09
Posts 209

9 posted 2000-02-09 09:08 AM


Oh how I can relate to this.
I wish you luck on your Job Echo.
All that driving made me tired.lol

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.

devina
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since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539
Cali
10 posted 2000-02-09 04:44 PM


Glad to see you're staying...we'd be lost without you...good luck with the job though...ther's always laptops sweetie!!!!!

PS. the driving that early musta been smooth...no traffic cept for those big trucks riding your @$$ huh??? From Cali m'self!!!


 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
11 posted 2000-02-09 06:01 PM


Sounds like a nice little break. Man, can ya see all that crying we did and why? You were gone a couple days.  hahaha....but hey, it was worth it!

You know I hope you get that job, cause that's what you want, and you certainly deserve it.  That's my story and I'm stickin to it. hehe

 <*\\\><

When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
12 posted 2000-02-09 06:34 PM


Echo, I already noticed you were back and couldn't figure out why.....'though I love having you around....I'm glad I know why now and will keep my finger, toes and everything I can crossed for you. Even my eyes ! Hugs.
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