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0 posted 02-08-2000 08:52 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for BSC

The little girl was standing there, looking so lost and alone
When I took her hand she simply smiled, and asked me to take her home.
Once there I asked her how she was, she looked so frightened and sad
And as her eyes filled up with tears, she told me she felt bad.
Everyone had left her, and no one even cared
She was left to survive all by herself, Oh God she was so scared.
As her life unfolded in front of me, the heaviness grew in my heart
She needed much more than I could give, this kid was falling apart.
So I gathered her into my open arms, and gently stroked her hair
Rocking slowly back and forth, I told her I'd always be there.
She held on a little tighter, but there was still no trust in her eyes
For those she'd counted on before, had left without goodbyes.
When she finally started talking, she struggled with what to say
Afraid that she was bothering me, afraid... I'd walk away.
I had to make her understand, that I wasn't going to let go
So I sat her down beside me, and said what she needed to know.
I told her she was the little me, and I knew her inside out
I knew her fears and weaknesses, along with all her doubt.
I told her I knew about the guilt, she'd carried around inside
And all the heartache hurting her, and how hard I knew she'd tried.
The more I talked, the deeper her stare, as she gazed into my eyes
And I knew she was finally getting - some answers to all of her whys.
So the door at long last was open, for both the child and I
Now all that is left for us to do, is strengthen our new found ties.





[This message has been edited by BSC (edited 02-08-2000).]
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1 posted 02-08-2000 09:09 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Absolutely beautiful!!~ the story line was fantastic.. It flowed from start to finish.. Very well done Bravo!

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2 posted 02-08-2000 09:42 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

BSC, this did flow very nicely. The story was told beautifully. -SEA
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3 posted 02-08-2000 12:30 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Oh so absolutely beautiful, and heart tearing and warming.  Great job!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

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4 posted 02-08-2000 12:51 PM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Thanks so much for your kind replies, the kid inside helped.....
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5 posted 02-26-2000 08:44 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

This is beautiful.
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6 posted 02-26-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

BSC...
this is SO deeply touching...I read it and know this child and the tender soul of the person who wrote it...i understand.
this is a beautiful moment you have shared. thank you, take care, janet marie

 ...there are places inside all our souls...
that have never been touched...
there are places inside our hearts...
that need to be loved this much...
Janet Marie

*I miss you baby...
I love you, always.*

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7 posted 02-26-2000 09:22 PM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Thanks LostDreamer...didn't expect to see this out again....There's a kid in all of us, I was glad to find mine.....
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8 posted 02-26-2000 09:37 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

BSC~
A gentle, loving piece.
HUGS to 'adult'.
HUGS to the 'child'.
HUGS to YOU !
~*Marge*~


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BSC, a splendid account of the beginning footfalls along a healing path. An earnest "thank you" for this gifting.

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I can see that this took alot of soul searching to write.
You have done an excellent job with your feelings here.
This is one of few long one`s that have kept my attention all the way through.
Thank you for the read BSC.

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This is so beautiful, you did a great job!!!  
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very touching  
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I thank all of you for your kind words, I know it was kind of long, and I appreciate that all of you took the time to read it.
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Very well written. A poem that keeps your attention by flowing smoothly, with interest, never seems long.
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Excellent piece, tender and comforting! Well done!

Denise
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16 posted 02-29-2000 07:41 AM       View Profile for BSC   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BSC

Septsong and dsnyder - Thank you so much for your encouraging words, I'm grateful to you for reading it....
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17 posted 07-19-2000 08:26 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth   Email Elizabeth   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Elizabeth's Home Page   View IP for Elizabeth

This was a very loving and comforting poem. I really enjoyed it, Bonnie.

Elizabeth


I'm grabbing my hat and coat
I'm leaving the cat a note
Quick call me a ferry boat-getting out of town!


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The kid inside of me
that was never allowed
to be,cried throughout
this gentle and sweet read!

This belongs in the book.
I hope you will post it there!

I must say that you are one
of the best writers at passions!


Gossamerwings ;)
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BTTT with this!!    

Gossamerwings ;)
 
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