[First Post] 23
This is one of my few poems so please be honest as to what you think about it...
It is supposed to describe the feelings of a lover (which is me) being seperated from his love.
All seemed so well until we part
but now I´m not so sure
no words from you as welcomed cure
for pains, inflicted on a longing heart
Doubts, like an invading army, storm
the battered walls of my loves keep
the fruits of sadness they´re here to reap
and unknown thought in my heads to form
Do you still think of me?
No! the chorus echos through the walls
(Another of my defenders falls)
Will we still be we?
No! the chorus echos through the halls
(They are in! I here the calls)
What will our future be?
None! the silent voices cry
(yet more of my heroes die)
for you it would be nought to expell these forces
few words by phone or letter brought
would still these painly nagging thought
would be the freeing army on white horses
so here I sit and wait for rescue
as all my walls are getting thinner
and I wonder who will be the winner
them or us and love so true
(which I deeply feel for you)