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Timeless Sorrow (A Poet DeVine Challenge)
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Timeless Sorrow (A Poet DeVine Challenge) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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TIMELESS SORROW < !signature-->‘Tis midnight on the hallowed shore Of sands swept to the ocean floor. Beneath a thick and foggy mist Of darkest death Sweet Night hath kissed. Amidst the shadow of a spire, That once burned of brilliance and fire. But dimmed and void of all light shone, Now guards none from Hymen's groan. A wail of anguish through each night Of misappropriated plight, Searching an endless tomorrow, Cries the ghost of Timeless Sorrow. A man who held his lifelong dream In a lover's eyes once agleam. But by temptation fell to shame, Giving his lust before his name. There, by the glint gone from her eye, By a sad and silent goodbye, He cast his life unto the sea Upon a ship named Misery. That once again true love might smile In purest white walking that aisle. Her eyes upon a brighter face, Than his, who by love, brought disgrace. Only in hopes would come a day Her memory might slip away. But stormy skies held him steadfast Anchored, somehow, to dismayed past. Every wind upon the ocean Breathing fire from her emotion. Every wave a crashing token Of the promise he had broken. Every spatter of fallen rain An ikon of tears spent in vain. Every glimpse of lightning ‘cross the sky, Quickening the heart and the eye. As if, like love, a blinding tease That only leads to darker seas. As if by passion, lured on, By her very essence, hope drawn. So from seasons of regretting, From years spent, never forgetting, Toward calmer skies, through gentle foam, The Misery guided him home. Per chance to look upon her eyes. To see her love, see her surprise. By the slim chance she might forgive, That, somehow, again he might live. Wherein by landfall come to sight Beneath glimmering lighthouse light, A marble cross facing the sea That called to him from sheer beauty. But closer inspection thereof Brought words to wrench his heart of love. "Forever longing, here lies she Who lost her love to Misery." Awakened to his sin of pride Upon her grave there, too, he died. The lighthouse above, falling dark, As if, somehow, his grave to mark. For the raging tides of the sea Carried him back to Misery, To search Forever's tomorrow For her soul in Timeless Sorrow. Michael Anderson It's the little things you take for granted, That'll mean the most to you when they're gone. [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-08-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Goosebumps! This gave me goosebumps...A dark, sad tale, Michael. This is absolutely wonderful. I could smell the sea...see that cross in the darkness... sigh! Challenge well and truly met. Thanks!  |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Hard to find the words to adequately reply, as the level of your poetry is so exceptional. A privelege to experience. |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Michael from start to finish it sang ....... a sweet song of sadness as I could feel the ocean roar If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Michael, this blew me away. The story you tell is so powerful and your words flowed perfectly. This is wonderful!  -SEA |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I would have to say this challenge was met and then some! Hauntingly sad Michael! Written so very well! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Wow, what a chilling poem. Incredible! Challenge well met! I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
An incredible piece of writing Michael...I see love has only helped your already wonderful talent for writing |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
PdV, glad to see I gave you the little goosies. Indeed, this was probably the most in depth challenge I ever had. It was truly a pleasure to write this one. Thanks for knowing me so well. Thank you everyone else for the kind comments. Michael |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
WOW Michael, would that be good enough as reply to such a powerful dramatic piece. Somehow I don't think so, but it's the best I can come up with. Brilliantly done. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Ah Michael, what a graceful return you have made! Nothing like a sad ballad to give one thankful pause -- excellent work. --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
It doesn't even seem like a challenge to you to come up with an exquisite poem like this, it flowed so smoothly to the end, while carrying a burden of sorrow throughout. A sad poem but very easy to read Well done, as always Liz |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Amen to all the previous comments, and a #10 rating in every respect. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
It twas beautiful before I realized it was a challenge, even more so now...you've fully exceeded the limits on this one Micheal, so vivid and emotional...need I say I liked it??? Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
excellent...bravo.....I bow to the master... "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Michael, I never know what to expect when opening one of your poems (other than it is going to be great), you often leave me speechless, and this is one of those times! Did Jesus laugh? I think He did, 'cause He was once a little kid; and all of us were made with joy both sugar-spice girl and snake-snail boy! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
A humble bow to you, my friend...  |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Michael, hauntingly beautiful, you've written it well, kudos! |
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Tasi Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 38Canada |
So tragic I feel my heart bruise with every passing line . Excellent , thankyou!! |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
You leave me breathless. What a mastery of words you have written. Bravo!! -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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WolfsMate Member
since 2000-01-14
Posts 121New York |
Dark and hauntingly beautiful verse. Loved this. "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near" |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
mesmerizing michael mesmerizing |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Amazing how you're always there to match my moods, Michaael. Once again, you've nailed it on the head! (Are you physic or something???) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Chris, Not physic, more like physcotic I think...LOL Thank you all once again for the kind replies. Michael |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Michael this is a lovely romantic love story but a very sad ending. You write so good. James |
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