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Timeless Sorrow (A Poet DeVine Challenge)

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Michael
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0 posted 02-08-2000 03:44 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Michael

TIMELESS SORROW

‘Tis midnight on the hallowed shore
Of sands swept to the ocean floor.
Beneath a thick and foggy mist
Of darkest death Sweet Night hath kissed.
Amidst the shadow of a spire,
That once burned of brilliance and fire.
But dimmed and void of all light shone,
Now guards none from Hymen's groan.

A wail of anguish through each night
Of misappropriated plight,
Searching an endless tomorrow,
Cries the ghost of Timeless Sorrow.
A man who held his lifelong dream
In a lover's eyes once agleam.
But by temptation fell to shame,
Giving his lust before his name.

There, by the glint gone from her eye,
By a sad and silent goodbye,
He cast his life unto the sea
Upon a ship named Misery.
That once again true love might smile
In purest white walking that aisle.
Her eyes upon a brighter face,
Than his, who by love, brought disgrace.

Only in hopes would come a day
Her memory might slip away.
But stormy skies held him steadfast
Anchored, somehow, to dismayed past.
Every wind upon the ocean
Breathing fire from her emotion.
Every wave a crashing token
Of the promise he had broken.

Every spatter of fallen rain
An ikon of tears spent in vain.
Every glimpse of lightning ‘cross the sky,
Quickening the heart and the eye.
As if, like love, a blinding tease
That only leads to darker seas.
As if by passion, lured on,
By her very essence, hope drawn.

So from seasons of regretting,
From years spent, never forgetting,
Toward calmer skies, through gentle foam,
The Misery guided him home.
Per chance to look upon her eyes.
To see her love, see her surprise.
By the slim chance she might forgive,
That, somehow, again he might live.

Wherein by landfall come to sight
Beneath glimmering lighthouse light,
A marble cross facing the sea
That called to him from sheer beauty.
But closer inspection thereof
Brought words to wrench his heart of love.
"Forever longing, here lies she
Who lost her love to Misery."

Awakened to his sin of pride
Upon her grave there, too, he died.
The lighthouse above, falling dark,
As if, somehow, his grave to mark.
For the raging tides of the sea
Carried him back to Misery,
To search Forever's tomorrow
For her soul in Timeless Sorrow.

Michael Anderson




 It's the little things you take for granted,
That'll mean the most to you when they're gone.








[This message has been edited by Michael (edited 02-08-2000).]
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1 posted 02-08-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Goosebumps! This gave me goosebumps...A dark, sad tale, Michael. This is absolutely wonderful. I could smell the sea...see that cross in the darkness... sigh! Challenge well and truly met. Thanks!  
Mike
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2 posted 02-08-2000 08:57 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Hard to find the words to adequately reply, as the level of your poetry is so exceptional.
A privelege to experience.
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3 posted 02-08-2000 09:02 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Michael from start to finish it sang ....... a sweet song of sadness as I could feel the ocean roar

 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
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4 posted 02-08-2000 09:52 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Michael, this blew me away. The story you tell is so powerful and your words flowed perfectly. This is wonderful!   -SEA
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I would have to say this challenge was met and then some! Hauntingly sad Michael! Written so very well!

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
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6 posted 02-08-2000 10:51 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Wow, what a chilling poem. Incredible! Challenge well met!

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
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An incredible piece of writing Michael...I see love has only helped your already wonderful talent for writing  
Michael
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8 posted 02-08-2000 02:35 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

PdV, glad to see I gave you the little goosies.  Indeed, this was probably the most in depth challenge I ever had.  It was truly a pleasure to write this one.  Thanks for knowing me so well.

Thank you everyone else for the kind comments.


Michael
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WOW Michael, would that be good enough as reply to such a powerful dramatic piece.
Somehow I don't think so, but it's the best I can come up with. Brilliantly done.

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

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10 posted 02-08-2000 07:18 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Ah Michael, what a graceful return you have made!  Nothing like a sad ballad to give one thankful pause -- excellent work.  

--Kess


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

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11 posted 02-08-2000 07:54 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

It doesn't even seem like a challenge to you to come up with an exquisite poem like this, it flowed so smoothly to the end, while carrying a burden of sorrow throughout. A sad poem but very easy to read
Well done, as always
Liz
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12 posted 02-08-2000 08:28 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

Amen to all the previous comments, and a #10 rating in every respect.
devina
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13 posted 02-08-2000 08:56 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

It twas beautiful before I realized it was a challenge, even more so now...you've fully exceeded the limits on this one Micheal, so vivid and emotional...need I say I liked it???

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
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14 posted 02-08-2000 09:05 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

excellent...bravo.....I bow to the master...

 "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~


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15 posted 02-09-2000 04:16 AM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Michael, I never know what to expect when opening one of your poems (other than it is going to be great), you often leave me speechless, and this is one of those times!

 Did Jesus laugh?
I think He did,
'cause He was once
a little kid;
and all of us
were made with joy
both sugar-spice girl
and snake-snail boy!
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A humble bow to you, my friend...
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17 posted 02-09-2000 10:32 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

Michael, hauntingly beautiful, you've written it well, kudos!
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18 posted 02-09-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for Tasi   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tasi

So tragic I feel my heart bruise with every passing line . Excellent , thankyou!!
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19 posted 02-09-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for kitkat   Email kitkat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kitkat

You leave me breathless. What a mastery of words you have written. Bravo!!

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You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face
and show the world all the love in your heart
Then people are gonna treat you better
You're gonna find, yes you will
That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King


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20 posted 02-10-2000 01:48 AM       View Profile for WolfsMate   Email WolfsMate   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WolfsMate

Dark and hauntingly beautiful verse. Loved this.

 "You never have to worry...Never fear for I am near"
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21 posted 02-10-2000 02:21 AM       View Profile for wayoutwalt   Email wayoutwalt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for wayoutwalt

mesmerizing michael mesmerizing
Christopher
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22 posted 02-10-2000 03:01 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Amazing how you're always there to match my moods, Michaael. Once again, you've nailed it on the head! (Are you physic or something???)
Michael
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23 posted 02-10-2000 06:45 AM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Chris, Not physic, more like physcotic I think...LOL

Thank you all once again for the kind replies.


Michael
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24 posted 02-10-2000 06:56 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Michael this is a lovely romantic love story but a very sad ending.  You write so good.  James
 
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