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As You Breathed

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Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


0 posted 02-08-2000 12:02 AM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Skyfyre

I lingered in your darkened room tonight
To listen to you breathing as you slept;
And only shadows clothed you from my sight
As closer to your sweet repose I crept,
To place a gentle kiss upon your brow,
Intending only this, and not to stay;
But slumbering, you called to me, and now
The Fiend could not have tempted me away.
I watched the working of your velvet lips,
And saw their softness part to speak my name;
You gestured then with dreaming fingertips,
As though you sought another's hand to claim.
I gazed at you in quiet disbelief,
And questioning the soundness of my ears,
But through my house of doubt there crept the thief
Whose name is Hope, to rob me of my fears.

I glided close beside your sleeping form,
As though admittance to your dream to seek;
Your breath upon my skin was gently warm
As tendrils of my hair caressed your cheek.
With trembling hand, I brushed the wisps aside,
Then trailed my fingers softly down your face,
While passion born of wanting long denied
Electrified the swiftly closing space
Between my lips and yours.  Your features shone
Beneath my gaze, a lover's vision styled
More gracefully than any I had known
And as you stirred, and then awoke, I smiled
No longer worried for the consequence,
I met your lips before the question came;
Without remorse, I cast aside pretense,
Well knowing things could never be the same ...

Then wakefulness assailed my dreaming eye,
And as you slept, I breathed a wistful sigh.


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

© Copyright 2000 Linda Anderson - All Rights Reserved
WhtDove
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since 07-22-99
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1 posted 02-08-2000 12:09 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Talk about a sigh! Wow you got one from me!
This was fantastic!

 <*\\\><

When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
Mike
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2 posted 02-08-2000 12:10 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I dreamt I supped of satin lips,
Sailed the skies on passion's ships,
And when I woke at dawn's first light,
Saw Venus steal into the night.
bobbycat
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3 posted 02-08-2000 12:14 AM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

Bravo! Bravo! I am in such awe......that was magnificant!  

Bobbycat =^..^=
SEA
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with you


4 posted 02-08-2000 12:23 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Skyfyre, this is very.......ah............ stirring...........ah...goodnight! -SEA
(loved it- saw it all in my mind)
Mistikman
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5 posted 02-08-2000 12:25 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

cooooool......

*Mistikman stands in awe of the magnificent poem before him*

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


6 posted 02-08-2000 03:40 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

First off, WOW! I felt a quiet hush the whole way through, giving me a sense of restrained "action!" Wonderful job at controlling the feeling! And the play from desire to actuality to desire was well done as well. It's a bit sad to have to wake realizing it's a dream, but I love unexpected surprises.

I do have a question however. It may just be me being stupid -or tired which I would prefer to think is the case- but who is "The Fiend?" As soon as I read that, I got the impression of another woman...? But if there's another woman, then is that saying that she thinks in the second stanza that he's leaving the other woman? Don't know. Tired. Will go to bed.

Nan
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7 posted 02-08-2000 06:52 AM       View Profile for Nan   Email Nan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nan's Home Page   View IP for Nan

Dream or no dream, Kess - this is great... especially considering that waking from the dream didn't necessarily negate fulfillment.... Perhaps that was to come next???

Nice job..
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8 posted 02-08-2000 07:21 AM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Skyfyre-
This is electrifying.
I like it.
~*Marge*~



 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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tori
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Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA


9 posted 02-08-2000 09:49 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

Once again Sky~ I  am astounded by your talent
Bravo girl..


 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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Echo Rhayne
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10 posted 02-08-2000 12:31 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Kess, WoW I dont even know what to say!!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

Michael
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11 posted 02-08-2000 12:37 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

This piece is a dance across emotion, Kess.  From fear to anguish to peace to relief, I was swept by every line of this marvelous poem.  wonderful work, I sure have missed this place.


Michael
Skyfyre
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Sitting in Michael's Lap


12 posted 02-08-2000 01:08 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

Wht Dove:  Thank you, a sigh is what I was after!  

Mike:  Lovely reply -- thank you dearly.  

bobbycat:  Glad you enjoyed, love your kittycon!  

SEA:  (fanning you) I tried not to build it up quite that much -- sorry!  

Mistikman:  A curtsey to you, sir, what a sweet thing to say.

Christopher:  The Fiend is a rather obscure reference to the Devil, Satan, whatever.  The Big Bad Dude LOL.  Glad you enjoyed the rest, and I agree with Michael -- get some sleep, willya?  

Nan:  One never knows, I'll tell you how it turns out ...  

Marge:  electrifying is a first -- thank you!  Glad it charged you up!  

tori, Echo:  both astounded and speechless -- I'm blushing here!  

Michael -- "a dance across emotion."  Sounds like an excellent line for another poem to me!  Thanks for reading, and we missed you too!

--Kess



 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Evad
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13 posted 02-08-2000 01:12 PM       View Profile for Evad   Email Evad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Evad

I felt the tenderness and wanting. Thanks!
hoot_owl_rn
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since 07-05-99
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14 posted 02-08-2000 01:13 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Kess...I have to say, this is absolutely one of the best poems I have ever read here or anywhere else for that matter. Your rhythm is marvelous, your rhyme perfect, but even more, your story line so precise and intact throughout the entire poem. Your use of imagery intices nearly every sense. I just can not say enough good about it or for that matter, nor can my words even begin to speak of its greatness. APPLAUDING!!!!
Oh just one more word about it....

PUBLISH!!!!!
Meadowmuse
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15 posted 02-09-2000 05:13 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

I'm so glad I saw this piece...absolute mastery with your craft, Kess. Nothing else need be said.

Claire
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