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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio 
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If thou hast wandered ever so far To make thee thy bride with unseen scar I beg thee forgive my weeping heart, For how could thou know this cursed fate? Oh, wandering warrior, I fear 'tis too late. My man of arms...Oh, how quickly we fade Unto the dawn of departed day. I beg thee, forgive thy weeping heart. I am not worthy, yet less I am fair To be forsaken in thy charming care. Withering soul of depleated lust burn, Burn whispering fire, feel sovereign spurn. I beg thee, forgive thy weeping heart. Thou hast awakened to encroachment, disbelief. Though within this, my dearest, sweet relief. For low, thy heart unworthy of true love. Scorned nevermore. Take thee to heaven above. I beg thee, forgive... [This message has been edited by Sally S. (edited 02-07-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sally- Positively lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! Excellent..I love this Sally....you've come back with a vengence!  |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Enchanting...very lovely... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Sally you've done a terrific job!  <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed very much... well done. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sally, this style really suits you well! Wonderful job, lady fair |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
Thank you all for the encouraging replies. I won't tell you how long this poem took to write...LOL. (not very) Perhaps I should spend more time on my poetry. One could end up with a masterpiece!! Again, my thanks. |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
I love the imagery and format... Makes me feel like I'm reading a old-time, "forbidden" diary entry Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Lovely poem....I liked the lilt it had--it flowed very smoothly....I am envious! Bobbycat =^..^= |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Exceptional work, Sally. This one grabbed at me deep down. I really enjoyed it. Michael |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sally this was extremely beautiful, I love this sort of poetry I only with I had the talent to write this way...Looking out for more of your work.  Tracie |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Sally you are so talented. I only wish I could write like that. You have written a beautiful piece Tracie I will be looking out for more of your work OOPS I DIDN'T THINK THAT MY FIRST ONE WENT. SORRY NOW YOU HAVE 2 FROM ME  [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 02-08-2000).] |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
this is great Sally...all I can say is wow Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sally - sock it to 'em with the wonderful archaic language... I absolutely love it...  |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
**curtsies ever so demurely** Thank you. I really enjoy this type of poetry. Writing it myself was an added bonus. LoL I'm glad y'all liked it. (oops, wrong accent!  ) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very lovely was all i was going to say then i decided nonononon gotta say something witty something witty yuh yuh loved it sally nice poem! |
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