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Dear Mama

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Jason Danes
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0 posted 02-07-2000 06:24 PM       View Profile for Jason Danes   Email Jason Danes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Danes



Dear Mama,

I'm lost and all alone
I don't know what to do
My dreaded fear has come to life
She told me we were through

Could you rock me in your arms
And kiss my tears away?
Or sing to me a lulaby
And tell me it's OK

I sit here all torn up inside
My life has fell apart
My one and all has left me now
And broke my little heart

Why did I grow up so fast
To have to feel this pain?
I'd rather be fighting with G.I. Joe
Or playing football in the rain

I always know I have you here
When troubles come my way
You always give me good advice
And listen to what I say

I've done what you told me
And prayed to God above
Dear mama please come and pray with me
I've lost my only love

                      
© Copyright 2000 Jason Danes - All Rights Reserved
Corazon
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1 posted 02-07-2000 06:30 PM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

this is nice, sad but nice, you sound like you have a good momma ...welcome  
Mistikman
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since 01-10-2000
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San Jose, CA, USA


2 posted 02-07-2000 06:32 PM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Ooh, goosebumps. Great poem, especially since it is your first post. Welcome to Passions, may your stay be long and fruitful  

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
Alina Le Ann
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since 01-30-2000
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INDIANA


3 posted 02-07-2000 06:38 PM       View Profile for Alina Le Ann   Email Alina Le Ann   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Alina Le Ann's Home Page   View IP for Alina Le Ann

WOW!!!!

This poem is awesome....
it brought tears to my eyes....VERY VERY well written!


Alina Le Ann
Bbuzz
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4 posted 02-07-2000 06:58 PM       View Profile for Bbuzz   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bbuzz

Not much is as painful as the loss of a first love. I Remember. Well written poem Jason! Thank God for Mammas!
HelmutB
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5 posted 02-07-2000 07:34 PM       View Profile for HelmutB   Email HelmutB   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit HelmutB's Home Page   View IP for HelmutB

Welcome to Passion
What a poem you have presented
I can relate to your feeling all to well
Well done and so excusitly

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

devina
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since 10-28-1999
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Northern Cali


6 posted 02-07-2000 07:51 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This is soo sweet...I'm glad you've realized that mothers are ALWAYS good at healing pain, no matter the age!! Welcome to our family, this poem was absolutely wonderful!!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Poet deVine
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7 posted 02-07-2000 09:50 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Welcome to Passions! Please check your email for a special welcome!  
JOY 14
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since 09-22-1999
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Wisconsin USA


8 posted 02-07-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for JOY 14   Email JOY 14   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JOY 14's Home Page   View IP for JOY 14

Ah, this is very beautiful, Jason.  You're lucky you have such a loving mother.

Joy
Sally S.
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9 posted 02-07-2000 10:01 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

What a sweet poem.  Welcome to Passions, Jason.  Pull up a computer chair and stay a while.  
bobbycat
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10 posted 02-07-2000 10:03 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

Very beautiful, Jason....I can only hope that one day, in the future, my son will come to me for comfort, too, as youhave described in your poem....great job!  

Bobbycat =^..^=
Lynn
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11 posted 02-07-2000 10:13 PM       View Profile for Lynn   Email Lynn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lynn


Welcome to Passions!
Outstanding entrance if I do
Say so my self.


 If time cannot heal your pain, you can always cry on my shoulder. ~Jenn~
Wolfgang
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Hamilton, Ont. Canada


12 posted 02-07-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Wolfgang   Email Wolfgang   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Wolfgang's Home Page   View IP for Wolfgang

Naw you havn't Jason!!
You've got Mama, and be sure you treat her real good!
Well done.
SEA
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13 posted 02-08-2000 12:37 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Jason, WELCOME!! You sure started good, making us Mommas' get all weepy! This is an excellent poem! When things are bad in my life, I remember my Mom rocking me. That is my safe place to go. -SEA
hoot_owl_rn
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Glen Hope, PA USA


14 posted 02-08-2000 11:33 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

What a great poem to bring your entrance to the site. Nicely done and welcome to passions  
Echo Rhayne
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15 posted 02-08-2000 01:06 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

awwwwwww and welcome to the family!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

January Flowers
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since 02-01-2000
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South Carolina


16 posted 02-08-2000 01:42 PM       View Profile for January Flowers   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for January Flowers

Love my mommy too!  Welcome to Passions!  
PREACH
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17 posted 02-08-2000 01:57 PM       View Profile for PREACH   Email PREACH   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PREACH

I know the pain that you speek of in this poem all to well. And i liked how you gave the poem the twist of it coming from a very young man instead of an adult.  To me it adds to the fact that the support from the mother is so important. I was wondering is this about you or did it just cross your mind.  But great job.

PREACH
Jason Danes
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18 posted 02-09-2000 01:52 AM       View Profile for Jason Danes   Email Jason Danes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jason Danes

Thank you all for your replies to my first entrance! This was a time that I have experienced here recently, in which my mom, as always helped me through. She cried too when I read it to her.
Justbleu
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since 08-31-99
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Oregon, Originally From Alaska


19 posted 02-09-2000 10:15 AM       View Profile for Justbleu   Email Justbleu   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Justbleu's Home Page   View IP for Justbleu

This is really nice...wonderful poem to your Mom!! It is sooo sad though but I'm glad you have a friend in your Mom!!  I often wish I wasn't an adult!!  

Welcome to Passions!!

Take Care
Bridgette


 Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."
Wizzard
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20 posted 02-09-2000 11:31 AM       View Profile for Wizzard   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Wizzard

Tomorrow brings a new day and the chance for a new love.
What a great poem you have written for your Mom.

 Today is the first day of the rest of your life.
jascanvey
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since 12-26-1999
Posts 130
England


21 posted 02-09-2000 03:54 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

This is just sooo sweet!! Welcome to passions, may your stay be a long one!!
WilliamHugh
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MA


22 posted 02-10-2000 12:33 PM       View Profile for WilliamHugh   Email WilliamHugh   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for WilliamHugh

wow, ouch, wonderful, sweet, touching
Kyttn
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23 posted 02-10-2000 12:45 PM       View Profile for Kyttn   Email Kyttn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Kyttn's Home Page   View IP for Kyttn

What a sad and wonderful poem.   :`(

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