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Cotton Candy Skies

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tori
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0 posted 02-07-2000 05:19 PM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

One morning when you wake up
You will see the light of day
Until that morning comes my dear
You'll dream your life away
On rainbow colored ice you skate
With wings upon your feet
Fly through hill's of daffodil's
Until bitter time is sweet
Skies of amber waves of grain
Dance in sun lights glow
For truth in black and white my love
You truly, do not know
Gaining worth of one's self
Admitting to the lies
Drift away in silent nights
In cotton candy skies

  © tori 2000



 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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[This message has been edited by tori (edited 02-07-2000).]
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1 posted 02-07-2000 05:47 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Tori, this  sang to me! SO NICE! -SEA
tori
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Thank you Sea!! this came to me  after conversation with a few 16 year olds..lol...

 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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3 posted 02-07-2000 07:56 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Tori-
This is very, very nice.
Sixteen year olds can be inspiring
with their views and spirit.

I wrote a poem by the same title
and it's interesting how different it is.
Perhaps I'll share it with you.  

I really like the perceptions in this piece.
~*Marge*~



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Mike
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4 posted 02-07-2000 10:37 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Enjoyed... flowed very nicely. Well done.
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5 posted 02-07-2000 10:43 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Tori what imagery and wow the flow! Melted right off the page! Excellent work, bravo! Clapping, clapping!  

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
monique
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6 posted 02-08-2000 02:50 AM       View Profile for monique   Email monique   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for monique

WOW! Your poem sure made my spirit lift up high. I will be soaring for awhile.
monique
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Marge~I would love to read the poem! your right they do inspier ~ thanks.

Mike~ Thanks for reading glad you enjoyed!

Rebecca~ Thank you girl !


monique~ Thanks so much its always nice to know you've lifted one's spirits....




 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
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Toerag
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8 posted 02-08-2000 08:07 AM       View Profile for Toerag   Email Toerag   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Toerag

Cotton candy is so sweet,
Something you would like to eat,
But until man learns to fly,
He can't taste those candy skies

But there's things here on the ground,
That are as sweet as can be found,
In those cotton candy skies,
It's right there in between your thi...um, uh, er...eyes..yea, that's it...

very nice poem gal....

[This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 02-08-2000).]
HelmutB
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Well if there is a cotton candy sky i'm in it
But don't wait too long for me I love candy  
such nice and certainly sweet poem Tori
I know you just as sweet  

 The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

tori
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10 posted 02-08-2000 08:54 AM       View Profile for tori   Email tori   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tori's Home Page   View IP for tori

LOL~ loved yours too Mr Rag...

Helmut~ thanks buddy... Big Hugs..

 If with pen in hand I've made you think
I've not wasted one drop of ink
Vlh.
visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm
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11 posted 02-08-2000 08:59 AM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

There is a lot of good stuff in this poem.. hope and patience... I like it...  
Echo Rhayne
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12 posted 02-08-2000 12:26 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

love it tori!  Flows greatly too!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

Michael
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13 posted 02-08-2000 12:31 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

Love the allusion and the flow of this piece.  Beautifully done, tori.


Michael
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14 posted 02-26-2000 08:31 PM       View Profile for Lost Dreamer   Email Lost Dreamer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lost Dreamer

Loved the imagery in this, nice job
Denise
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15 posted 02-27-2000 09:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Wonderful poem, Tori!  

Denise
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Cotton Candy skies...what nice images that brings to mind  
 
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