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Moonlight sadness...

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Breathe~
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0 posted 02-07-2000 05:11 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Breathe~

Pale moon wonder graces the night
her elegant form gliding silently
in sultry dance among the stars
Gentle light luminous
seducing all that gaze upon her...

Ice particles hidden in a wintry breeze
float through the night air
drawn to a huddled form
Shrouding her hair in a frosty veil
coating damp lashes with snowflakes...

The woman shivers
hugging her knees closer
She sinks further into the chair
cold plastic biting into her naked arms
She takes a long drag on her only warmth
embers glowing..then fading
exhaled in a clouded sigh

Tears flow freely in lunar glow
gliding translucence
reflected in unearthly beauty
She gazes sadly upon the moon
looking through to another time
when shimmering light fell
soft upon a trembling body
Moonlight embracing sadness
echoing haunted eyes
trapped within a distant memory...



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1 posted 02-07-2000 06:03 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Breathe, this paints such a sad and beautiful picture. Very nice.   -SEA
Breathe~
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2 posted 02-07-2000 07:42 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Thank you SEA...*smiling*

 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
bobbycat
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3 posted 02-07-2000 09:52 PM       View Profile for bobbycat   Email bobbycat   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bobbycat

Wow....I could actually see the woman, feel her chills....you paint such an excellent picture with your words.   Great job.  

Bobbycat =^..^=
Sally S.
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4 posted 02-07-2000 09:58 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

I'd have to say this is one of the best free verse poems I've read in quite some time.  Lovely imagery here.  Well done!!  
Majestic
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5 posted 02-07-2000 11:42 PM       View Profile for Majestic   Email Majestic   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Majestic

Wow..what imagery....I can still see the breath as it steams from her mouth...excellent..
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6 posted 02-07-2000 11:51 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Breathe~
Ahhhhh !  You've been in touch
with a wonderous muse in this one.
This is a beautifully image-ladened
piece of your heart.
Powerfully alive with feeling.
~*Marge*~




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Mistikman
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7 posted 02-08-2000 12:00 AM       View Profile for Mistikman   Email Mistikman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mistikman

Beautiful poem Breathe~, I loved it. I get a real sense of lonliness from this.

 I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion
WhtDove
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8 posted 02-08-2000 12:04 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Wonderful imagery! You brought it alive in my world! Very well done!

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
Breathe~
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9 posted 02-08-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Bobbycat...Thank you... )

Sally...Wow!...what a wonderful compliment!  Thanks... )

Majestic...and the chill in her heart...thank you... )

Marge...Not only do you have the most wonderful poems...you have wonderful comments too...I love just seeing your name...cuz I know something good is coming... )

Thank you Mistikman...are you going to be posting some more poems with us?  I hope so..I am looking forward to it... )

WhtDove...from my world to yours...Thank you... )


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
hoot_owl_rn
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10 posted 02-08-2000 11:29 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Beautiful Imagery  
Echo Rhayne
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11 posted 02-08-2000 01:05 PM       View Profile for Echo Rhayne   Email Echo Rhayne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Echo Rhayne

Wonderful poem!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

Andrew Scott
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12 posted 02-08-2000 04:46 PM       View Profile for Andrew Scott   Email Andrew Scott   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Andrew Scott

Very sad indeed Breathe... you painted the scene well and I commend your effort. I bow to you and yours... and the lady in the snow.
Breathe~
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13 posted 02-08-2000 09:03 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Thank you Hoot and Echo... )

Andrew...I am no longer the lady in the snow...that was an effort in itself... )  Thank you for your comments...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
Meadowmuse
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14 posted 02-08-2000 10:34 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Some very delicate and nicely crafted imagery here...I really enjoyed reading  this!

Claire
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Thank you Claire!... )

 Freedom of expression is the watch word...
First__Knight
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WOW what a picture I see in your words....awesome
 
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