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Gentle Rose- Trilogy

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Mike
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0 posted 02-07-2000 12:53 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Mike

I.

Do you hear the snowflakes falling,
Upon your cold and silent tomb?
Do you hear my heartbreak calling,
To Gentle Rose, my precious bloom?
I thought you were forevermore,
Until the night, were stole away,
Now forever, means nevermore,
Except your void, pain's here to stay.
I kneel alone, my soul disguised,
In center of life's barren stage,
Forgotten lines now improvised,
My scripted heart, a worn blank page.
O' Gentle Rose, as snowflakes fall,
On bended knee, to thee I call.

II.

One year has past, since Gentle Rose has died,
Since dirges played and silent mourners cried,
When does the pain release its viselike grip
Upon mine soul, let loose this sinking ship?
Adrift upon this childless sea, I gaze,
Upon her empty room, as empty days,
In silent scream, black pain does overwhelm,
No where I sail, no Captain at the helm.
O' Gentle Rose, why won't you set me free,
I beg of you, why won't you answer me?
Do not you hear, I sing your hymns of praise?
Upon my knees, I seek your sweet bouquets.
O' Gentle Rose, your bud will never bloom,
But yet I fear, 'tis I within the tomb.

III.

Gentle Rose, for e'er I will remember,
Thy perfect grace, asleep in final slumber,
Angelic face, upon death's pillow lay,
As mourners weep and silent dirges play,
Cries of grief and sorrow, silence of the tomb,
What requiem, for rose that ne'er will bloom?

What bell does toll the passing of a child?
A life so young, so pure... unreconciled
That death should grasp her now without remorse
Just as her life sets sail its rocky course
Come Terpsichore, and sing your songs of dance
And curse the evil Thanatos whose lance
Strikes deep into the mourner's grieving soul
Rise up I pray, her life I do extol
A Gentle Rose, whose beauty graced this earth
A loving soul, so caring, full of mirth,
I beg of thee, no songs of sorrow weep,
But shout our hymns of praise, so all might keep,
Her in our hearts for e'er, for we have known
A Gentle Rose, that God now calls his own.



[This message has been edited by Mike (edited 02-08-2000).]
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Wow...that blurred the page...misted me up...

Wonderful read... )


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2 posted 02-07-2000 01:11 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Painful yet beautifully written. This appears to me to be stages of the grieving process. Very well done.

Denise
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Mike, this is so sad yet written so well. Maybe the following part could be about the Angle Rose..............-SEA
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4 posted 02-07-2000 01:56 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This poem is so beautifully written and the message so clear and true--The emotion you have clothed in words of such perfect perception that it broke my heart.
Mike
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Thank you all for your very kind comments.
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Humble bow, my friend..
tori
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Your words show that love lives forever more.. Very heart touching Mike

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8 posted 02-07-2000 09:47 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Mike we are not being nice. We are being honest. This is so beautiful! You have a great 'sonnet' talent...quite close to (shall I say it?) the Bard!  
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EXACTLY what I was thinking, Poet deVine.....     very well, done, Mike.  

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10 posted 02-07-2000 10:47 PM       View Profile for Sally S.   Email Sally S.   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sally S.

Absolutely breathtaking....beautiful, romantic, loving...and sad all wrapped in one grand package.  You are extremely talented.
Lovely, Mike.  
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11 posted 02-07-2000 11:19 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Mike-
The title called to my heart ...
the content left me in tears.
Well-done, gentle heart.
Very well done.
~*Marge*~


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Mike
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12 posted 02-08-2000 08:14 AM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

I am humbled by your responses.  Thank you ever so much for the comments.
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enjoyed your poem,Mike.
Echo Rhayne
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mike, WoW!!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

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Mike,
   Not only is this poem emotionally stirring and deftly evocative...it is so well written! This piece has that archaic, yet timeless feel to it that I am drawn toward, and you have such a gift with the language. I could read your work all day.

Claire
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Exquisite, Mike. You portray the emotions felt with the loss of a loved one breathtakingly well. We should all be so talented.

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Gemini
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17 posted 02-08-2000 08:03 PM       View Profile for Gemini   Email Gemini   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Gemini

This was a most exqusite poem.  I loved it!
Very heartfelt.
Marilyn
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Yep..this one does it for sure Tim. I have become your greatest fan! This was exquisite!
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I have to agree....this is beautifully written. A timeless piece indeed!
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Oh, these poems are so beautiful!  Their anguished sorrow reads like music, like the old poets, in that poignant and haunting way.  
You have a tremendous talent in writing, and your sorrow tears at my heart.

I am so terribly sorry for your loss.  What a great love you have for your Gentle Rose.

I would be honored if you might, some day, feel like peeking at my memorial poetry site designed for all of us who have lost beloved children, or anyone.  It is a place for sharing poetry of love and memories.  Called "Coming Through the Fire", its URL is: http://www.angelfire.com/zine/bereaved

You could e-mail me there, if you wish, at bereaved_2000@yahoo.com
Mike
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As I indicated in the earlier post, I am humbled by your responses.
Rosemary, I was the one honored to be able to visit your site.
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Excellent my drear Watson,

While I listen to "Bet's" love is a rose. Oh how I wish more could only hear you.

All my best,

 
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Tim/Mike~
This is even more beautiful on second read~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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