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Nice Guys Finish Last... (re: Nice Guys by Mistikman)
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Nice Guys Finish Last... (re: Nice Guys by Mistikman) |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
this poem is partially inspired by, partially a response to, and partially a message of hope for Mistikman's poem "Nice Guys"... Nice Guys Finish Last (But Never Least) She said "If only I could meet a nice guy like you." As she cried on my shoulder -- a sad tale, yet true. And tomorrow she'll be dating Johnny quarterback And he'll break her heart, sending her tearfully back To one who's so close, yet feeling so far away From the love I desire and the words I can't say And as the tears fall from her love-blinded eyes My heart gently heaves with tormenting sighs With resignation I release her of my passions Seeking love's hand in a different fashion I vow to myself to ne'er again speak of Cupid Until his sweet arrows strike both me and my beloved And so I wait with love's bright flames yet unlit Keeping my heart safe from those who would take it 'Til I finally met someone who made the connection As I sat there silently craving her affection there is still hope for love, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Boy with no brain?? I beg to differ!! This is a wonderful piece! So sad when the one we admire...does not feel the same in return...but it happens more than we like...and you caught the moment perfectly.. you day will come...  )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was a great way to reply to his poem...in my opinion, as us girls get older, only then do we actually seek to find love...and nice guys as you put it...till then you guys should wait patiently cuz in the end, you'll get the girl!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
*CLAP* *CLAP* *CLAP* Bravo! Thank you for the phenominal reponse Jerome, I loved it. You have a wonderful way with words, and this is one of the best I have read from you. I did not leave the teen forum, I only posted here because my poem was in response to another forum. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
breathe: "boy with no brain" is my patented signature... "jerome" is just too common *heh*... thank you for your kind response though  devina: thank you for the advice, but you see, i've already found my soul-mate... (the last two lines were meant to hint at that)  the guy in the poem gives up on the girl that wont see him for what he truly is and ends up meeting another wonderful girl by chance... one that appreciates him ... that's how i tie the poem in with personal experience... mistikman: *heh* you're more than welcome for the response... i just didn't want you thinking ALL girls were like that... i managed to find the perfect one for me (and i found her when i finally stopped looking for her)... take heart with what devina and breathe said and apply it to yourself... you'll find her someday... oh yes, and i didn't actually think you were leaving the teen forum (at least i hope you wont)... i was just being all sentimental for no reason at all *heh*... sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
The memories this poem brings back. I had a female like this once. But it was 5 years until I actually got to date her for 2 months. Those were the best of my life. But I made a mistake and may never have her back. Well written. You captured the feelings well. "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all." |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice guys don't always finish last |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
PK, ya know, it occurs to me that us nice girls got left out, do guys have any idea what it's like for us to fall for a guy, but because we are not "easy" they won't give us the time of day? It really does go both ways. I was a Good Girl. I was always passed over until the guys realized they didn't want a woman that had been passed around.  -SEA |
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PREACH Junior Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 20 |
THIS POEM IS TALKING STRIGHT FROM MY HEART, WHICH IS PRETTY WIERD. HEY, HOW DID YOU DO THAT. NAW, JUST KIDDING BUT I HAVEN'T READ THE OTHER POEM BUT THIS ONE IS ABSOLUTELY GREAT KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK. PREACH |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Very good response poem! I loved it! Bobbycat =^..^= |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
What a great poem. Shows sometimes that what you want isnt what you get. The QB is nice for awhile but, if they follow the stereotype get old quick. Glad it worked out in the end..... Now if only I could meet a nice guy  ) He he I did....Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
scorched dragon: i'm sorry to hear about your loss... i hope i didn't cause too many unhappy memories... hoot_owl: i know they dont, but often times they do... i just wanted to write a poem that pointed out the fact that even though they may "finish last" they never finish "least"... in other words, nice guys generally end up with girls better suited for them sea: i apologize for making you feel left out ^_^*... my idea came from mistikman's poem that dealt with nice GUYS and his poem came from the philosophy 101 topic about the same subject from the male perspective... i do realize that many girls often suffer the same fate... my poem is more about the idea of how both "nice guys" and "nice girls" need to stop drooling over the jocks and beauty queens and find someone worthy of their sincere hearts... in my poem, the guy learns this, the girl doesn't... and the girl ends up losing the "nice guy" she claimed to want so badly to another girl who understood what she needed and wanted in a guy... mabye that's no excuse, but i hope it's a least a little in my defense... preach: well, actually this poem is about a common teenage sentiment... one that i, thankfully, never had to experience... i always swooned over the nice, shy girls... but myself being too shy to talk to them *heh*... it never worked out very well... bobbycat: thank you  cuddlez: thank you for your kind response, and i'm glad you've found someone worthy of yourself sincerely, jerome the boy with no brain A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Well, I know what you are saying about the nice shy girls, Jerome. Theres just something about the loud energetic girls that makes me not want to waste my time. I am a nurturer by nature, so when I see the quiet girl in the corner, something just makes me want to know her and understand her. Kinda wierd I guess. The girl I am trying to win the affection of is one of the quiet girls I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
Actually I only have the fondest of memories of that time. So you have brought back the best of my memories. Thank you. "Life's greatest mystery isn't the meaning of life. To love and be loved is the meaning of life. Now how to attain those is the greatest mystery of all." |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Great job on the poem-jerome. Truly there is hope! And~To add a smart-aleky remark: If nice guys finish last, then why aren't I in first place???  |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Thanks P_K for the message of hope...LOL Good poem. Michael Oh, and Chris, you are in first - you're just looking the wrong direction again. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
But....but....I'm a damn nice guy...???? And I don't finish last?....Hell, I rarely finish anything I start?...But this is a great poem and those "Johnny Quarterbacks" are all a bunch of losers anyhow?....Get a Toerag, the epitomy of nice....or of something..... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent poem. Great response too.  |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
Very well done I enjoyed this much... If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Jerome this was great! I really enjoyed this! LOL @ Micahel, he's right Chris! LOL@ you too Toe! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Great response! All I have to say is that not all nice guys finish last *grin* oh ooooops sorry anyways hehe great poem! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
thank you all for your kind responses... *heh* i think this is the most attention any of my poems has every drawn... (it would have to be the one i wrote in a 5 minute spur-of-the-moment daze)... thank you againsincerely, jerome the mysterious priest A savage place! as holy and enchanted As e'er beneath a waning moon was haunted By woman wailing for her demon-lover! ~Coleridge |
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