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Waiting Deliverance
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Waiting Deliverance |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Waiting Deliverance There is thunder in the distance where the glow of dusk seeps in a vision that enlightens shadow with its energy Climb up this creation find the first star of chaos born in dreadful wonder Watch the tortured movement of minutes hanging waiting deliverance from this twilight combat where sharp and shooting brilliance makes this breath minute yet alive with so much purpose that fear drowns It seems that this mighty cacophony would still this small claim of sand’s time in merciless magic But no This pulse thrills to know a mighty heart was not stilled by ions blazing energy but awakened |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Beautiful! So ponderous and touching. Loved the ending. Thanks. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Martie, sounds astronomically cool! Really very neat!  -SEA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie- I want to tell you that when I see your name on a new entry, I need to see immediately what your pen has inked. Your style is so unique. Your words form thoughts that my mind comprehends, ONLY after I've seen them through your eyes. Remarkable talent. Admirable style. Thank you for everything you share. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, I have always trembled at the sight and sound of lightening and thunder, and never though of it as making this minute "alive with so much purpose" as to drown fear. A lovely piece, as always Liz |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful writing as always, Martie!  Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity--thank you for your kind comment. Sea--Astronomically cool--thanks for these great words. Marge--That's one of the nicest compliments I've ever received. Thank you! Liz--Thank you for sharing feelings. Denise--Thanks for the wonderful. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ba-bam! Awesome Martie! I always look forward to seeing what you're going to pull off next! If I may make one tiny (I hope) suggestion. You call it "Wating" Deliverance...what about "Awaiting?" |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
wonderfully written |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Exceptional as always... |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Excellent Martie!! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wonderful work, as always, Martie. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Christopher--What a compliment, Thanks. Ruth--thanks for reading and comment Mike--Thanks for the exceptional--it means alot to me. Thankyou Echo for the excellent. Balladeer--thank you so much for reading and commenting. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
I really like the over-lapping transparencies very nicely done. |
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christies heart Member
since 1999-08-10
Posts 189NJ, USA |
Wonderful poem. I love the meaning too!! It seems that this mighty cacophony would still this small claim of sand’s time in merciless magic........ wonderful!!!!! Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians Native American prayer |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful imagery! I sit breathlessly awaiting the coming storm... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I may never write another storm poem again - I know I'll never come close to this ILTWYW (switching to an acronym - for I Lve The Way You Write - seems I say it everytime) |
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