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Waiting Deliverance

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Martie
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Waiting Deliverance

There is thunder in the distance
where the glow of dusk seeps
in a vision that enlightens shadow
with its energy

Climb up this creation
find the first star
of chaos
born in dreadful wonder

Watch the tortured movement
of minutes hanging
waiting deliverance
from this twilight combat
where sharp and shooting brilliance
makes this breath minute
yet alive with so much purpose
that fear drowns  

It seems that
this mighty cacophony
would still this small claim
of sandís time
in merciless magic

But no

This pulse thrills  
to know a mighty heart
was not stilled
by ions blazing energy

but awakened


© Copyright 2000 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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Beautiful!  So ponderous and touching.  Loved the ending.  Thanks.
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Martie, sounds astronomically cool! Really very neat! -SEA
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3 posted 02-06-2000 10:23 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie-
I want to tell you that when I see
your name on a new entry, I need to
see immediately what your pen has inked.

Your style is so unique.
Your words form thoughts that my
mind comprehends, ONLY after I've seen
them through your eyes.

Remarkable talent.
Admirable style.
Thank you for everything you share.
~*Marge*~




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Martie, I have always trembled at the sight and sound of lightening and thunder, and never though of it as making this minute "alive with so much purpose" as to drown fear. A lovely piece, as always
Liz
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Wonderful writing as always, Martie!  

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serenity--thank you for your kind comment.

Sea--Astronomically cool--thanks for these great words.

Marge--That's one of the nicest compliments I've ever received.  Thank you!

Liz--Thank you for sharing feelings.

Denise--Thanks for the wonderful.
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Ba-bam!
Awesome Martie!
I always look forward to seeing what you're going to pull off next!
If I may make one tiny (I hope) suggestion.
You call it "Wating" Deliverance...what about "Awaiting?"
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wonderfully written  
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Exceptional as always...
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Excellent Martie!!

 Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin*

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Wonderful work, as always, Martie.
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Christopher--What a compliment, Thanks.

Ruth--thanks for reading and comment

Mike--Thanks for the exceptional--it means alot to me.

Thankyou Echo for the excellent.

Balladeer--thank you so much for reading and commenting.
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I really like the over-lapping transparencies very nicely done.
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Wonderful poem. I love the meaning too!! It

seems that
this mighty cacophony
would still this small claim
of sandís time
in merciless magic........

wonderful!!!!!



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Beautiful imagery! I sit breathlessly awaiting the coming storm...
Wilfred Yeats
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I may never write another storm poem again - I know I'll never come close to this
ILTWYW (switching to an acronym - for I Lve The Way You Write - seems I say it everytime)
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