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Alias
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since 2000-02-06
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0 posted 2000-02-06 04:17 AM


Love is everything
and yet it is so small,
i wonder if love
is even love at all?

My head's a swirling cosmos,
of thoughts and wants and gains
but when i think of all the good....
i think of all the pains.

Yet when i make a single call,
i know my love is true-
cos' Bec, you're everything to me
and i know that i love you.



[This message has been edited by Alias (edited 02-10-2000).]

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Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
Posts 378
California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now
1 posted 2000-02-06 04:21 AM


How lovely!  I'm sure she's a lucky girl to have someone like you.     Good job.  Welcome to Passions.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."



Rex Allen McCoy
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since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
2 posted 2000-02-06 05:55 AM


Welcome Alias
walking the highwire is an easy and enjoyable task when the the net of love is there for us
when it's not ... man O' man that's a long thin line!

Rex}<{{{{o>

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

3 posted 2000-02-06 05:56 AM


Alias, lovely poem, Bec is a lucky girl!
Welcome to passions!   < !signature-->

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge




[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 02-06-2000).]

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
4 posted 2000-02-06 08:51 AM


I do hope you shared this with her...welcome to passions
Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-02-06 10:50 AM


Welcome to the family. Please check your email for something special!  

catwomen
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 49

6 posted 2000-02-06 12:15 PM


Welcome
Beautiful poem She is a lucky girl


 

Breathe~
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since 2000-02-05
Posts 315
Washington...
7 posted 2000-02-06 12:31 PM


What a wonderful tribute... )

Very tender...


 Freedom of expression is the watch word...

Denise
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Posts 22648

8 posted 2000-02-06 04:36 PM


Welcome to Passions, Alias! This is so sweet!

Denise

Katie-Scarlett
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since 2000-01-17
Posts 7

9 posted 2000-02-06 11:09 PM


Words that everyone wants to here...
well done.

binky_bec
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since 2000-02-10
Posts 7

10 posted 2000-02-10 04:02 AM


LOVE answered.......

why? i hear you ask
that i love you with all my heart?
this question i will answer
though i'm mot sure where to start.

love was an expression
of which i use to criticise
i never knew what it was like
it was vacant in my life.

but then i met that person
and my doubts were born anew
i had finally fallen in love
with that person who is you

your personality is warm
you make me smile and sigh
if only i could tell you
but undoubtingly i try

your voice is my saviour
my unrelenting dream
is to have you to hold
so i can let my feelings free

it upsets me to hear
you ask why that special one is you
i sit and stare for hours
because I know my love for you is true

i don't know how to tell you
in a way you will accept
you've brightened up my life
and for that i am forever in your debt

my love extends beyond description
i can't express the way i feel
frustration often takes it's toll
i'm not sure how i deal

forever i will love you
forever i will yearn
to always have you near
as long as the stars do burn

but i myself have questions
to ask just why it's me
you have chosen to love
what seems unconditionally

i am nothing special
i'm really rather plain
i don't agree with compliments
i am nothing special to gain

forever i will wonder
if that dreaded day
will ever come upon me
the day your heart is taken away

Forever yours
Bec


Alias
Junior Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 30

11 posted 2000-02-10 05:59 AM


Bec you're wrong,
you're everything.
"nothing special" is a lie-
You've made my day,
you've made my life
and now you've made me cry.

My heart is here
for you to hold
A risk I'm game to take-
cos my love is real,
forever...
In your hands my heart is safe.

You're the reason
i wake up every day-
The reason i survive.
But if your love
should ever leave
I'm sure that i would die.

Bec there is no way to say how i feel. the words simply don't exist. Nothing i could ever say would fully express my feelings for you, i love you so much. Bec, you'll always be the most important person in my life.

I'm the luckiest guy alive
when you say that you are mine,
I think i'll use another wish;
won't you be my valentine?

yours forever,
Thomas
XOXOXOX




[This message has been edited by Alias (edited 02-10-2000).]

gypsyqlt
Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 147
Bradford,Vt USA
12 posted 2000-02-10 07:13 AM


Hi.

Nice poem, only one suggestion; lose the word BUT in the 3rd verse. How about
Yet, when I make a single call ?   I love the rhyme(my forte, even though the critics pan me for it !LOL)  like the little on-line love affair you and Bec have going on...
Jocelyn

Alias
Junior Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 30

13 posted 2000-02-10 11:56 PM


Thanks again everyone for the comments, special thanks to you Jocelyn  
the help was much appreciated...

Bec, everything you do and say is just beautiful.. i really wish that we can be together forever..

I'm just another guy.
A guy who loves you more than anyone else.

Thomas  

anonymousfemale
Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797
Limbo
14 posted 2000-02-12 04:50 AM


Very nice Thomas. it's Egg here by the way. It is a very touching poem. Good work.  
~ViXeN~
Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 93
Guelph, Ont. Canada
15 posted 2000-02-13 01:08 AM


awwww this is soo sweet
i think im gonna cry ! hehe

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