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I'm Sorry

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tracie66
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0 posted 02-06-2000 12:24 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66



I'm sorry i've been so selfish lately and haven't given you my time

You've shown me your loving attention when you really needed mine

So here I am to say how sorry I really am
And to give you my support in any way I can

So can I be forgiven for being so self absorbed
And to you my selfless one, it's you that I applaud
© Copyright 2000 Tracie Maree Collis - All Rights Reserved
Rex Allen McCoy
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1 posted 02-06-2000 07:53 AM       View Profile for Rex Allen McCoy   Email Rex Allen McCoy   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Rex Allen McCoy's Home Page   View IP for Rex Allen McCoy

thankyou tracie for sharing this
thats the nicest way you could say to people
' I care '

Rex}<{{{{o>
kaile
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2 posted 02-06-2000 08:08 AM       View Profile for kaile   Email kaile   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kaile

okie,i am new to poetry so what i am writing here is just my own personal feelings....hope you don't mind

i feel your poem is rather more like prose in some parts,maybe it will be better if you go like this:

you gave me your attention,
when you really needed mine...

your poem is kind of vague too---more details of how this person cared for you will be better,eg

He sent me flowers
when i was sick
to give solace
to my wounded soul....

i agree with Rex---this poem is the nicest way to show someone you do care....
tracie66
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3 posted 02-06-2000 08:41 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Rex thanks for your sweet reply     kaile welcome to passions thanks for your reply and I will keep it in mind all comments are well worth reading...Tracie  
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 02-06-2000 09:02 AM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

How's that old saying go...Love is never having to say you're sorry  
Denise
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5 posted 02-06-2000 04:07 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Heartfelt words that I'm sure will hit their mark!

Denise
tracie66
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6 posted 02-07-2000 04:33 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Thanks Ruth and Denise for your kind reply's..Tracie
 
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