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Breathe~
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0 posted 02-05-2000 11:34 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Breathe~

Hurling into the shower
sobbing until the water ran cold
fury
betrayal
hopelessnees
bouncing off the porcelain walls
returning to coat me
in my accusations
shaking in rage
kneeling on that hard porcelain
wracked by angry images
pelted by tepid water
and cold realities
lava tears burning hatred trails
in violent weeping
till sliding to the floor
in exhausted acceptance
watching the water play
upon defeated fingers
beading and rolling
moisture drops cooling
running in aimless rivers
along the white walls of my skin
steady porcelain rain
a soothing beat upon my back
calming me with wet caresses
surrounding salty remembrance
washing you away...


                      
© Copyright 2000 Denise Blackwell - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 02-05-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for catwomen   Email catwomen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for catwomen

your poem rang true for me.
Denise
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WOW! This is excellent writing, Breathe! Beautiful!

Denise
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Breathe~
A gripping portrayal, well stated.
~*Marge*~



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Breathe~
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4 posted 02-05-2000 11:54 PM       View Profile for Breathe~   Email Breathe~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Breathe~

Thank you catwoman... )

I see we are newbies together...

Denise...

Thanks!  *beaming*  Sad to say...there is more where that came from...*trying to think happy thoughts*

Marge...

Thank you...I feel like I am repeating myself... )  Interested in tutoring a horrid rhymer?  *grin*  I know it's hard...and I respect your ability... )
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*Strugles to catch her breath again after the stark realities of this poem.* Oh, I've been there and your poem rings so vividly true. Wonderful writing!
Breathe~
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Thank you Hoot... )


I was feeling pretty dark when I wrote it...
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whew, excellent, you captured the darkness and more....great writing!
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Thank you!   )

but I think your too kind...


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