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just_another_fe
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0 posted 2000-02-05 05:23 PM


As i see you standing next to her
I can't help but wonder why?
You keep calling her baby
and a tear drops from my eye.
I wanna be the one that you hold tight.
Tell me again...why cant you be with me tonight?


[This message has been edited by just_another_fe (edited 02-17-2000).]

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devina
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Cali
1 posted 2000-02-05 06:35 PM


I can feel your longing in this one...you have created a good image here...but a little hint...your poems will get more response if you put them on one a day!!! Welcome!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

just_another_fe
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2 posted 2000-02-09 02:05 AM


thanx for the hint.  
gypsyqlt
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3 posted 2000-02-10 07:07 AM


Oh Boy.  Personally, i'm touched.  I'm dealing right now with "my husband and the other woman".  Painful stuff, this.
I like this a lot.  Very clear, to the point.  I'd like more of it, though.Jocelyn

just_another_fe
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4 posted 2000-02-10 05:37 PM


thank you gypsyqlt. im sorry to hear you have to go through this sitution.  
i wouldnt wish it on anyone. ill try to expand on it and see what i come up with  

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