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Island Vine & Rare Vintage (two poems one post)

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Local Rebel
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0 posted 02-05-2000 01:02 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Local Rebel

Island Vine



The island vine
writes grapes in
Rolled up messages
Jammed in seafaring bottles
Remorse code
Tapped out on
Telegraph keys
Tap,
Tap,
Tap,
tap tap tap
Tap,
Tap,
Tap,

on Tenterhooks
she waits
as bottles wash
on Barren shores

Readers drink
taps and slashes
razors red
and black nails,
desire and thirst
lust in crimson verse

they Drink drunk
from shore borne
bottles
and thirst again

more

more

but they Leave her
on her island
like forgotten
grapes

a Tear falls like silk
on the tigress cheek
she waits
for someone
to drink her
instead of crushed
lexis
pressed from
her broken
heart

The island vine
Withers
As her fruit multiplies
Leaving nothing
Before ashes

Rare Vintage


She drinks like
Italian on tongue

Wine
She is hard
Glass like a bottle
Corked to the world
She stings with
A dry wang

But he
Needs the nails
And plum
Red
Crimson

He needs a strong
Full
Bodied nip

He needs her soft
Succulent sips
That hide
Like wine
Behind glass
Translucent

A grape easily bruised

He drinks her
full




 Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran
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Meadowmuse
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1 posted 02-05-2000 01:14 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Intoxicating, I'll grant you that.

(liked the "remorse code")


Claire
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2 posted 02-05-2000 03:20 PM       View Profile for Local Rebel   Email Local Rebel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Local Rebel

Thanks much Claire...  
devina
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The best "wine" I've had in years dear man!!!!  

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4 posted 02-05-2000 07:14 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Rebel-
Once in a great while a piece comes along that stuns me.  This one does.
I can't even find the exact words to tell you just how perfect I find this.

Rare Vintage may do it.
But, then ... even rarer than that.
So full-bodied with yet a subtle bouquet.

Stored this one in the cellar.
If you haven't guessed by now ...
I find it rich.
~*Marge*~




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Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 02-05-2000 08:42 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

I'll have to agree with Marge. Very rare vintage, these two verses. I savored them both equally.
Nice work
Liz
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Intoxicating verse here........very well done  
Denise
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7 posted 02-05-2000 10:38 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

These are both beautiful, LR! I enjoyed them immensley!  

Denise
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Have to admit...your name drew me in...
but your poems kept me here...

Very nice... )
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9 posted 02-06-2000 06:30 PM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I like both of these very much, LR... though I think the first is my favorite of the two... if only because I've tapped out that remorse code a few times myself... and the wait for a response is agonizing. *S*
Local Rebel
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Thanks so much everyone... glad you enjoyed.  

 Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran
Iloveit
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11 posted 02-07-2000 09:41 AM       View Profile for Iloveit   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Iloveit

liked these much rebel, you have a unique way of drawing images that make them so real, you leave one of your poems with the images still flashing...great work
Corazon
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12 posted 02-07-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for Corazon   Email Corazon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corazon

hey can I just ditto Iloveit, she said it almost perfectly

ROFG and eating those dang cookies again this morning

great work though, really  
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