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NateT
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0 posted 2000-02-05 01:57 AM



For a Moment in Time

I saw you today and my eyes left me
And for a moment in time I saw nothing but you in my life
Everything flowed like the river to the sea
I swam in your thoughts
And loved your memories
The beginning was the end
And I finally saw the whole picture
You were so kind to me
You came and made me realize the true nature of my soul
So what more could I do
But to restrict myself to the cause of everything that is right
Right but not wrong
A prediction of what I thought could never be the opposite
But to my dismay the sun fell down
And brought me back my eyes
Just in time to see reality fall
So the rivers ran dry
And the rain came to my thoughts
And washed away all that was so real
Everything that was so right
And now all my movements are wrong
And the familiarity of it all has gone away
So with sad endings near
I thought that no other options where available
But then regardless if the distance beyond doubts
You came back to me
The predictions of yesterday's lost was proven
But to be past based
That you are far beyond what I found familiar
Beyond what I know as fate
Could it be more then shadows
With stable dreams that continues to dwell within my soul
Yes I say
Yes I know
You are reality
And reality is my Heaven
For now the beginning is the end
And I finally see the whole picture now

This is for you Lisa...my first love...I miss you still...

Nate Tolentino



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1 posted 2000-02-05 02:39 AM


"you are far beyond what I found familiar..."
oooh, I wish I'd written that line!
  I'll be thinking of this one for awhile.
  Savoring thoughts of MY first love...
  (whom I later found out is gay)BUT that's another poem, I guess.  Thank you for dusting off some memories for me.

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2 posted 2000-02-05 03:27 PM


Nate T., this is beautiful. A first love always burns in your heart. -SEA
JamesMichael
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3 posted 2000-02-05 04:53 PM


Really nice Nate.  I enjoyed "I swam in your thoughts, and loved your memories" so much.
Its amazing how our minds can create such beauty sometimes.  James

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4 posted 2000-02-05 07:21 PM


First love! Wow..hadn't thought of him much til I read this..good one! Thanks!  

Elizabeth Santos
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5 posted 2000-02-05 07:51 PM


Excellent poem, Nate

And serenity, I'll be waiting for that poem of yours!

lIz  

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