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shuttered (something I just wrote)

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0 posted 02-05-2000 01:40 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

I just wrote this one straight from my head to the screen. The pun at the end shows I'm cheering up a little.

Mike

-shuttered-
There are roses rotting behind the shutter.
The man who grew the briar tried to knock them out,
But the thorns were sharp, unclean,
Painful to his tired hands.

Gloves only caught more of the same,
Plus magnified the color of dirt
And made the man's hands itchy,
Sweaty, uncomfortably trapped.

The smell of the roses rotting
Was cloying but not unpleasant.
Was death and shadows and lack of growth
Supposed to smell this sweet?
Like perfume and peat?

He sat down on his step, spade shining light
Caught from the sky at his feet.
He watched a bug move across cement specks,
Shadow wires lengthen down the street.

By that time, it was cold;
Time for the man to go in.
But he just sat there,
Realized his lies lacked thought,
And noticed his lilacs growing in.
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From your head to the screen...within those few brilliant inches of distance is a world that aches to be shared. Thank you for listening to your hea(rt)d.

I liked the detail of this piece.

Claire
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Oh....I like this  
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3 posted 02-05-2000 03:08 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

This......is really good!   -SEA
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4 posted 02-05-2000 07:39 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks, everyone. And jeez, Claire, you're making me blush...

Mike
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wow, what a writer! this is great!
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6 posted 05-22-2002 07:27 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

She said burn ... together.
-TON

 
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