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On The Outside Looking In
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On The Outside Looking In |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
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Alone she sits and sadly wonders why The best in life has simply passed her by Why always does it seem she’s looking in Through windows tightly closed – to her chagrin. She hears the laughter, their frivolity But as a ghost, a misted entity She isn’t seen or heard by anyone ‘Though valiantly she tries to join the fun. She sings a lovely song but ears don’t hear Her arms are open wide but none come near A river of despair is threatening Soon nothing is the song that she will sing. She fights the undertow despite the pain She gives it all she has as if she’ll gain At last the recompense due those who give Unselfishly to others as they live. Perhaps it takes a wiser one than she To figure out this puzzling mystery Are some in shadows dark consigned to stay And sadly watch as others gladly play? So lonely is this outside looking in Here yearning for the warmth and love within She sadly sits alone and wonders why In life the best has simply passed her by. |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
A puzzling mystery indeed! On the outside looking in looking for someone to befriend a wealth of self to be shared if only someone out there cared. My compliments for writing such a good poem. You are an excellent writer. DH |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
Beautiful poem, Denise. I usually have the opposite problem. I'm looking out the window, but can't get out.  ~Gene |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Denise, the best in life just hasn't got here yet sweetie. You made my heart hurt for you! What a sad,heartfelt poem! -SEA |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a sad story Denise. It doesn't sound like you though. Well written poem! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was great Denise...reminded me of that old song, "on the outside looking in"!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A sad, sweet tale, Denise! Hate that undertow feeling myself, seems like the only cure is to fight, keep it at bay, but sometimes, numbness comes anyway. Corinne |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Lovely, Denise, just try to remember all the good things that you have going for you, I know you are loved by so many people here. (((HUGS))) |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
Now you've done it I'm sad and lonely. WAIT! no I'm not I have wonderful friends like you right here at my finger tips I loved the poem but am now going to find one that makes me feel happy again. All just part of this wonderful rollercoaster we hang out in. Denise your the best! |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is beautiful, Denise, and sadly all too true for some.......I doubt that you are one, however. Anyone would want you in their group!  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Denise, this got me somehow. Right in the heart. Surely you are not writing about yourself? ~Hugs~ <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Denise- Well, my, my ! I see we write fiction too. Knowing how how your friendships abound, this one can't be about you. What a lovely little slice of life. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Lovely poem, and the sadness is overwhelming. I hope it was just a dark day, and that the next was brighter for you. |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
"her arms are opened wide, but none come near"-- powerful images in this one! Me likes it a lot. |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I'm glad you like this everybody! Yes, it is fiction. I was thinking of that song (old, Devina?! lol)'On The Outside Looking In' and just started writing! Thanks for all your wonderful comments and concern! You all are such fantastic people! Denise |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
You are very talented Denise, I love reading your poetry.... beautiful. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm more than a little startled--have you been spying on me? |
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Chris Goodman Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 92Issaquah, Washington usa |
"Perhaps it takes a wiser one than she To figure out this puzzling mystery Are some in shadows dark consigned to stay And sadly watch as others gladly play?" This is exactly how I felt when I was young. I love this poem. You are a wonderful poet. I hope in a few years I will write poetry as good as you write it. Chris Goodman Blue Moon |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I have definately been there...  (((((Big Hugs))))) |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thanks for reading and for your kind comments! Denise |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Very lovely... |
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samsonheart Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 72Missouri rez. |
Beautiful Denise, I've been away awhile, your poetry is a breath of fresh air. samsonheart |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Thank you, Breathe and Samsonheart! I'm glad you liked it! Denise [This message has been edited by dsnyder (edited 02-05-2000).] |
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