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On The Outside Looking In

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Denise
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0 posted 02-04-2000 04:53 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Denise


Alone she sits and sadly wonders why
The best in life has simply passed her by
Why always does it seem she’s looking in
Through windows tightly closed – to her chagrin.

She hears the laughter, their frivolity
But as a ghost, a misted entity
She isn’t seen or heard by anyone
‘Though valiantly she tries to join the fun.

She sings a lovely song but ears don’t hear
Her arms are open wide but none come near
A river of despair is threatening
Soon nothing is the song that she will sing.

She fights the undertow despite the pain
She gives it all she has as if she’ll gain
At last the recompense due those who give
Unselfishly to others as they live.

Perhaps it takes a wiser one than she
To figure out this puzzling mystery
Are some in shadows dark consigned to stay
And sadly watch as others gladly play?

So lonely is this outside looking in
Here yearning for the warmth and love within
She sadly sits alone and wonders why
In life the best has simply passed her by.

© Copyright 2000 Denise - All Rights Reserved
Danny Holloway
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1 posted 02-04-2000 05:08 PM       View Profile for Danny Holloway   Email Danny Holloway   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Danny Holloway

A puzzling mystery indeed!

On the outside looking in
looking for someone to befriend
a wealth of self to be shared
if only someone out there cared.

My compliments for writing such a good poem.
You are an excellent writer.
DH
Gene
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2 posted 02-04-2000 05:14 PM       View Profile for Gene   Email Gene   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Gene's Home Page   View IP for Gene

Beautiful poem, Denise.

I usually have the opposite problem. I'm looking out the window, but can't get out.  

~Gene
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3 posted 02-04-2000 05:24 PM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Denise, the best in life just hasn't got here yet sweetie. You made my heart hurt for you! What a sad,heartfelt poem! -SEA
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4 posted 02-04-2000 06:39 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

What a sad story Denise.  It doesn't sound like you though.  Well written poem!
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5 posted 02-04-2000 06:46 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This was great Denise...reminded me of that old song, "on the outside looking in"!!!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Corinne
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6 posted 02-04-2000 07:23 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

A sad, sweet tale, Denise!

Hate that undertow feeling myself, seems like the only cure is to fight, keep it at bay, but sometimes, numbness comes anyway.


Corinne
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7 posted 02-04-2000 07:29 PM       View Profile for jascanvey   Email jascanvey   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jascanvey

Lovely, Denise, just try to remember all the good things that you have going for you, I know you are loved by so many people here.
(((HUGS)))
Paul Hoekman
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Now you've done it
I'm sad and lonely.
WAIT! no I'm not
I have wonderful friends
like you right here at my finger tips
I loved the poem but am now going to
find one that makes me feel happy again.
All just part of this wonderful
rollercoaster we hang out in.
Denise your the best!
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This is beautiful, Denise, and sadly all too true for some.......I doubt that you are one, however. Anyone would want you in their group!  
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Denise, this got me somehow. Right in the heart. Surely you are not writing about yourself?   ~Hugs~

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When you can't make up your mind
Which way is right for you,
Stop and softly ask yourself,
What Would Jesus Do?
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11 posted 02-04-2000 10:36 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Denise-

Well, my, my !
I see we write fiction too.
Knowing how how your friendships abound,
this one can't be about you.

What a lovely little slice of life.
~*Marge*~



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12 posted 02-04-2000 10:56 PM       View Profile for L Tiuch   Email L Tiuch   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for L Tiuch

Lovely poem, and the sadness is overwhelming.  I hope it was just a dark day, and that the next was brighter for you.
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13 posted 02-04-2000 11:02 PM       View Profile for Master   Email Master   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Master's Home Page   View IP for Master

"her arms are opened wide, but none come near"-- powerful images in this one! Me likes it a lot.
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14 posted 02-04-2000 11:47 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

I'm glad you like this everybody! Yes, it is fiction. I was thinking of that song (old, Devina?! lol)'On The Outside Looking In' and just started writing! Thanks for all your wonderful comments and concern! You all are such fantastic people!

Denise

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15 posted 02-05-2000 12:03 AM       View Profile for Red   Email Red   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Red

You are very talented Denise, I love reading your poetry.... beautiful.
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I'm more than a little startled--have you been spying on me?
Chris Goodman
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"Perhaps it takes a wiser one than she
To figure out this puzzling mystery
Are some in shadows dark consigned to stay
And sadly watch as others gladly play?"

This is exactly how I felt when I was young.
I love this poem.  You are a wonderful poet.  I hope in a few years I will write poetry as good as you write it.

Chris Goodman



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I have definately been there...
(((((Big Hugs)))))
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Thanks for reading and for your kind comments!  

Denise
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Very lovely...
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Beautiful Denise, I've been away awhile, your poetry is a breath of fresh air.
samsonheart
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Thank you, Breathe and Samsonheart! I'm glad you liked it!  

Denise

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