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To be or not to be

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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 02-04-2000 11:15 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Seymour Tabin

           To be or not to be

The human termite kneads the ground
To hives of glass and steel surround.
Where polluted fare corrupts the air
And spears the very heavens there.

They spread across the earth impress.
Like psoriasis of distress.
And sorely wounds the sweet of soil,
To a cauldrons boiling toil.

Heaven and earth are in rebel,
We are turning life into hell.
Despite our sagacious and wise.
We are constructing our own demise.

I fear our cup has tipped to down,
Filled the mould with deaths impound.
We swim this sea of misery,
The quick, the slow and orderly.

And though we pray our good intend,
I cannot see salvations end.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
SEA
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1 posted 02-04-2000 11:20 AM       View Profile for SEA   Email SEA   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for SEA

Seymour, Wow! You have painted a very vivid picture in my mind. Great poem.   -SEA
LngJhnAg
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2 posted 02-04-2000 11:22 AM       View Profile for LngJhnAg   Email LngJhnAg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LngJhnAg

Sy

This is a great poem!  I think its the best work you've done to date, and you have done a lot of great stuff.  This message is so clear, and your metaphor of termites and man is excellent.  Great job!
Elizabeth Santos
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3 posted 02-04-2000 11:45 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Sy,
I could never say enough about this poem, it is so magnificent in every way, the content, the message, the versing, and of course your beautiful wordage,all make for a piece that puts the most known of poets to shame. This is truly your best and the best that I have read anywhere in a long time. I can only say BRAVO! but that is not enough.
Liz
Nate Dogg
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4 posted 02-04-2000 11:48 AM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

Great poem and strong message!

 Nathan
devina
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5 posted 02-04-2000 11:52 AM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

This is an excellent message Sy...only you would be able to word it so beautifully and still get the point across!!!!!(you may bow before your audience Mr. Sy!!!)

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...
Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 02-04-2000 01:21 PM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

Everyone should have a chance to read this one, so back to the top it goes
Liz
Mike
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7 posted 02-04-2000 01:26 PM       View Profile for Mike   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mike

Well done.
Meadowmuse
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8 posted 02-04-2000 01:43 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Eloquent and interesting, Sy...good work.

Claire
Denise
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Skillful use of words as always, Seymour! Well done!
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10 posted 02-04-2000 02:10 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

Come, sweet Soul, to walk the land
where still the grass is virgin and
no glass, no steel, no one but me
and God is all that your eye can see.

Come, sweet Soul, to my haven home
where Indian and bison once ago roamed
where lark and hawk share the sky,
come and walk, with God and I.

For though we pray our good intend,
a glimpse of salvation, your soul to mend.

***

Sy, I continue to aspire to the imagination you so willingly share.  Thank you.

 Sunshine
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Martie
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11 posted 02-04-2000 02:36 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

I know the picture does seem grim
the earth so trampled by our whim
the sky it seems has lost its gleam
for shroud of gray so it would seem

But, light and life still flourish strong
and goodness still grows from the ground
and wisdom sings from many minds
and peace and love the spirit bind

Sy, wonderful poem and thought provoking message.
Gene
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I love poems about existentialism. This is a wonderful one.

~Gene
Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 02-04-2000 06:14 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sea, Thank you for the great.

LngJhnAg, Wonderful comment, thank you.

Elizabeth, Lovely words and bravo, thank you
Love Sy

Nate, Thanks for the strong message.

Devina, Thank you sweet devina.

Mike, Thanks for the well done.

Denise, thank you for the skillful. *L*

Sunshine, Amen to salvation. *L*

Matrie, Sweet poem, beautiful comment. *L*

U-gene, thank you for the wonderful.
 
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