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Shadow and Sunshine (last poem before I leave)
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Shadow and Sunshine (last poem before I leave) |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA 
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Sunshine and shadow were sisters Sunshine was sunny and fair. Shadow was moody and sullen with red lips and shining black hair. Sunshine made everyone happy and her golden hair fell o'er her brow. But Shadow grew jealous and angry and planned to kill Sunshine somehow. Sunshine had love in her reaches they planned to be married some day. But Shadow with eyes black as midnight suddenly stepped in the way. Sunshine grew paler and paler and grieved for her love that was gone. She still loved her own wayward sister even though she had done a cruel wrong. So Sunshine slipped into oblivion and Shadow crept into her place. Life would be richer and fuller if I could only see sweet Sunshine's face! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
You little stinker, Just when I thought your sunshine was gone here you are with one more song. Sunshine hasn't slipped into any oblivion, and Shadow may be creeping in, but won't dare to take you on, and you know..? Life is truely richer and fuller cause I'm graced with Sunshine's song..! Lucky Love |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sweet Echo, I wrote this for you a few days ago, but wanted to put it here in this thread for you to see. The Bridge There arises a bridge o'er the wildest of streams. A crossing, a portal, fair footpath to dreams. Sweet steps falling gingerly, this new bridge draws nigh. Coming closer, now crossing, tread steady, stay dry. Life's journey, a challenge you will Passionately meet, as our blessings and hearts form the bridge 'neath your feet. Godspeed and gentle crossings to you, Echo.  Claire |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I forgot to post my response to your poem!!  It's remarkable! I love how you've personified the dark and light of spirit with the tale of Sunshine and Shadow! Really a neat idea, with a very unique "sound" to it. This is a remarkable poem, Echo. As I read it, what kept whispering to my mind was how neat this concept would work for a children's poem or book. Something to think about, if you're ever of a mind to do childrens' tales. This would be fantastic!Please do keep writing! Your gift is grand! Claire |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Echo...if sunshine is let in through the shadows...it will shine ever sooo bright!! May sunshine touch you in all ways!! Take Care, K!! Bridgette Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Echo...you keep in touch now ya hear?...Speaking of "touching"...ya want some?..... |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent poetry! Keep writing (there's an old fashioned method some of us older poets use called paper and pen..try it ok!?)..Good luck! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent poem, Melanie! One of your best! Take care and hurry back to us! Denise Lovely poem for Melanie that you wrote, Claire! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You must know, Echo, that I really, really like this one! Excellent! Hurry back soon. Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
This was just excellent all the way around! Wish I could just reach through the screen and give you BIG HUGS!!! I'm gonna miss you!  |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
lucky...I sure am going to miss ya's *hugs* You take care! Claire...Thanks for putting it in here, I did read it in the forum the other day though =) Still making me cry though! Claire...a children's book huh?? Interesting, though I don't know. I wrote one children's book in 5th grade for my kindergarten buddy but thats about it. The only other books/short strories I have written wouldn't work for kids LoL...but thanks for the idea and vote of confidence! Bridgette..Thank you oh so much! *hugs* I am going to miss you! Email me!! Toe... (no comment LoL) Sharon...Hey, it aint just you so called older poets that use pen and pencil you know, every poem I have ever written has been handwritten first. Hand written and put into my journals and notebooks and (I have so many I have millions of places to put them) Denise...One of my best huh, thanks! I will take care and hurry back to y'all a.s.a.p!! You take care too! Sunshine...=) Glad you liked it, I just hope you don't have a jealous sister named Shadow, we wouldnt like that! Im going to miss you, take care! Rebecca...I am going to miss you too *sniff* and *reaching thr ough the screen* OW that hurt and giving you *GIGANTIC BONE CRUSHING BEAR HUGS* Hey it was worth pretending LoL *huggles* I really am going to miss you! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is a wonderful poem, Echo and a beautiful response from Claire. Keep writing and post on the forum when you have a chance Liz |
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