Ah, this is refreshing. Very different than most! I really like it. I have read it several times and I am still trying to get it. It is beautiful whatever it means. Sometimes I am "slow" to getting things.
Nice poem Mars!!!! I love poems that make you think...ones that aren't inherently obvious!! Very cool!!
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Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved."
Member Rara Avis
I loved your word choice, word play and message. One thing though, I hope you didn't mean "cistem" for system. Otherwise, you made fun of pretentiousness with more pretentiousness. Either way, I really enjoyed this.
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