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bsquirrel
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-sadness-
Sometimes, sadness is comforting, familiar,
Like a favorite blanket, choicely unraveling.
Hunkering in front of the television screen,
We live out lives of friends and neighbors.

Other times, sadness is beautiful -- its sheen
Casts light over darker recesses, crevices,
Problems and permutations of problems,
To remind us nothing is really wrong.

Sadness can be the ticking of a clock,
The scent and taste of raspberry cake.
A favorite mistake
Rolled on the tongue.

Written out in words, sung out in song,
Trimmed to fit situations.
Clipped expanse; short, long.

But right now, sadness is overbearing.
Lifting me, lurching, down to the ground,
Where among soil and petals, trash,
I feel dirty, useless. Bound.

The trick is to find joy
Even in something as small as a bee.
The trick isn't a trick at all.
It's beyond fork tines piercing raspberry.
It doesn't crumble, candles don't sit in it,
On it, or beside.
It's not about the color of lights,
How fast you can go in your ride.

I'd like to say it's all about love,
But even that I'm not sure.
I will say it's something
Barely felt,
Something clean, unbroken. Pure.
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1 posted 02-03-2000 10:49 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I really like the lines--
  "a favorite mistake, rolled on the tongue"
and please, spike if you're reading, DON'T
take that out of context!
  
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2 posted 02-03-2000 11:36 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

I simply love it when someone presents me with a thought I never would have thought of myself ....

'The trick is to find joy'
'It's beyond fork tines piercing raspberry.'

Beautifully done.
Thank you.
~*Marge*~



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3 posted 02-04-2000 01:21 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

And thank you both for your comments. I've been feeling a lot off lately, and for some reason, that seems to translate into my good poetry.

Mike
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Interesting and thought provoking piece. I enjoyed this!

Denise
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5 posted 02-04-2000 10:10 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Mike, this piece is quietly moving. I like how you've given sadness validity, a place all its own in our spectrum of emotions. I often use sadness as inspiration to write. On a personal level, it's been a sad time, of late, and what better than to embrace sorrow and reflect upon it, contrasting it with our other emotions, and through the movement of doing so, begin to heal. I am impressed with how you shared this. Thank you.


Claire

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I Have and still do relate to this. The sadness is felt in each line and each situation. I like this very much. In or out of context.

Rich
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7 posted 02-05-2000 12:48 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Thanks for all your kindness of my poem, and even more importantly, your understanding. I've been feeling down all this week -- that plane crash really shook me up. Here's to better, or at least happier, feelings soon.

Mike
 
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