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Drifting In An Emerald Sea Of Chaotic Wondering - Reworked

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Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


0 posted 02-03-2000 06:51 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Christopher

Wandering timelessly
      through a wasteland of doubt,
  -thoughts of you perish-

My mind drifts...
confusion
j
  e
    r
      k
        i
          n
            g

              at the tethers
     of reality's grasp.

Pulled this way-
-then that,

  I find myself dreaming...
Of a future...

A destiny filled
   with impossibilities
    and realized probabilities.

A step closer;

approaching destinations
     of fantasy's desire.

Crushed
Beneath these feet of iron

the hopes of others
    become
    diminished corpses,

brittle

frail

no more!

Reverberations of questions
-fly light years-

only to return
in seconds

And just at the climax,
    I approach my throne...

god-hood awaits!
    But no!
I am awake.

Yet...
am I still dreaming?

© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
Poet deVine
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1 posted 02-03-2000 07:04 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

Not dreaming oh god-like one!    Excellent verse, great presentation!!! Love it!
Denise
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2 posted 02-03-2000 07:19 PM       View Profile for Denise   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Denise

Hey Christopher, I thought you said you were not a poet!! Where did you ever get that idea! This is wonderful!!  

Denise
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3 posted 02-03-2000 07:27 PM       View Profile for RainbowGirl   Email RainbowGirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit RainbowGirl's Home Page   View IP for RainbowGirl

Chris: If you're dreaming, you must be a God cause I believe what we dream we can reach and therefore we can have so maybe we are what we dream.....Now did I tell you about the dream of.....  

HUSG

 The grape passes through the press to yield wine.
Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom..



[This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 02-03-2000).]
hoot_owl_rn
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4 posted 02-03-2000 07:38 PM       View Profile for hoot_owl_rn   Email hoot_owl_rn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit hoot_owl_rn's Home Page   View IP for hoot_owl_rn

Nice presentation Chris  

"Who looks outside dreams; who looks inside wakes." ~Carl Jung
Marilyn
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5 posted 02-03-2000 08:19 PM       View Profile for Marilyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Marilyn

I never know just what to say in reply to your work my friend. We have such different styles and yet you know just how to read my thoughts at times. Your talent is never ending Chris. Wonderful.
Isis
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6 posted 02-03-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for Isis   Email Isis   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Isis's Home Page   View IP for Isis

Chris, like Marilyn I too am always at a loss for words to adequately respond to your work.  This is brillant (as usual)  you never cease to amaze and interest people with your work.  Bravo!!  

 Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely.
~Isis~
(Sovereign of the Spirit)


Martie
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7 posted 02-03-2000 08:38 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This is very interesting Christopher, the format great and the feel, so real.
WhtDove
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8 posted 02-03-2000 09:26 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I always seem repetitive to your work. BUT, Chris this is Excellent!  
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9 posted 02-03-2000 10:21 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Christopher-
All works of dreams draw me.
This one had me spell-bound.
A most interesting piece.
I find that I like it very much.
Pretty gosh-darned good !
~*Marge*~


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Skyfyre
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10 posted 02-03-2000 10:40 PM       View Profile for Skyfyre   Email Skyfyre   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Skyfyre

I don't believe I ever saw the previous version, but I must say I like this one quite a bit ...

This had a dreamlike quality that was very true to the content -- the phrases and images were disconnected, a bit fuzzy 'round the edges -- yet they followed a sort of pseudo-logic that would make perfect sense to the dreamer.  You know I love your free verse, m'friend, and this is precisely why.

--Me


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

Nicole
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11 posted 02-05-2000 10:21 AM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

Quite an interesting poem you've given us to feast upon, m'friend.  I'm not quite sure if I've seen this one before, but the way you've formatted it (the word 'jerking') is waving a flag at me, so maybe I have.  I any case, I agree with Kess on the 'dreamlike' quality and will also add that the formatting for some reason stands out more on this one than others I have read of yours; it lends much to the piece overall.

Splendiferous, as always!  I'm thinking I'd like to see you write a dud...just once...lol




 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

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Corinne
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12 posted 02-05-2000 12:44 PM       View Profile for Corinne   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Corinne

A picture perfect portrait!


Corinne
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13 posted 02-05-2000 01:05 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Interesting approach, Christopher. Your presentation here showcases your own personal flavor of creativity.

Claire
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14 posted 02-05-2000 03:28 PM       View Profile for Nate Dogg   Email Nate Dogg   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Nate Dogg's Home Page   View IP for Nate Dogg

What an excellent creation you have here Christopher! I really enjoy your poems.

 Nathan
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration


15 posted 02-06-2000 02:22 AM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Oh geesh! Y'all know how to make me blush!

Thank you very much!
catwomen
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16 posted 02-06-2000 02:25 AM       View Profile for catwomen   Email catwomen   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for catwomen

truely talented.  so deep and filled with emotion
Michael
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17 posted 02-07-2000 10:10 PM       View Profile for Michael   Email Michael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Michael

The dreaming in life never stops my friend, only in death may we be awakened.  Wonderful work (expected no less).

michael
 
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