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Drifting In An Emerald Sea Of Chaotic Wondering - Reworked
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Drifting In An Emerald Sea Of Chaotic Wondering - Reworked |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Wandering timelessly through a wasteland of doubt, -thoughts of you perish- My mind drifts... confusion j e r k i n g at the tethers of reality's grasp. Pulled this way- -then that, I find myself dreaming... Of a future... A destiny filled with impossibilities and realized probabilities. A step closer; approaching destinations of fantasy's desire. Crushed Beneath these feet of iron the hopes of others become diminished corpses, brittle frail no more! Reverberations of questions -fly light years- only to return in seconds And just at the climax, I approach my throne... god-hood awaits! But no! I am awake. Yet... am I still dreaming? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Not dreaming oh god-like one!  Excellent verse, great presentation!!! Love it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Hey Christopher, I thought you said you were not a poet!! Where did you ever get that idea! This is wonderful!! Denise |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Chris: If you're dreaming, you must be a God cause I believe what we dream we can reach and therefore we can have so maybe we are what we dream.....Now did I tell you about the dream of.....  HUSG< !signature--> The grape passes through the press to yield wine. Your life must pass through the press of passion and pain to yield the wine of wisdom.. [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 02-03-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Nice presentation Chris "Who looks outside dreams; who looks inside wakes." ~Carl Jung |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I never know just what to say in reply to your work my friend. We have such different styles and yet you know just how to read my thoughts at times. Your talent is never ending Chris. Wonderful. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Chris, like Marilyn I too am always at a loss for words to adequately respond to your work. This is brillant (as usual) you never cease to amaze and interest people with your work. Bravo!! Let your heart guide you. It whispers, so listen closely. ~Isis~ (Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is very interesting Christopher, the format great and the feel, so real. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
I always seem repetitive to your work. BUT, Chris this is Excellent! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Christopher- All works of dreams draw me. This one had me spell-bound. A most interesting piece. I find that I like it very much. Pretty gosh-darned good ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
I don't believe I ever saw the previous version, but I must say I like this one quite a bit ... This had a dreamlike quality that was very true to the content -- the phrases and images were disconnected, a bit fuzzy 'round the edges -- yet they followed a sort of pseudo-logic that would make perfect sense to the dreamer. You know I love your free verse, m'friend, and this is precisely why. --Me Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Quite an interesting poem you've given us to feast upon, m'friend. I'm not quite sure if I've seen this one before, but the way you've formatted it (the word 'jerking') is waving a flag at me, so maybe I have. I any case, I agree with Kess on the 'dreamlike' quality and will also add that the formatting for some reason stands out more on this one than others I have read of yours; it lends much to the piece overall. Splendiferous, as always! I'm thinking I'd like to see you write a dud...just once...lol  May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A picture perfect portrait! Corinne |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Interesting approach, Christopher. Your presentation here showcases your own personal flavor of creativity. Claire |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
What an excellent creation you have here Christopher! I really enjoy your poems. Nathan |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Oh geesh! Y'all know how to make me blush! Thank you very much! |
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catwomen Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 49 |
truely talented. so deep and filled with emotion |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
The dreaming in life never stops my friend, only in death may we be awakened. Wonderful work (expected no less). michael |
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